Yunfan Poetry Special Edition
2022 · "Cauliflower Collection" Excellent Works Selection
Reviews are based on the time of the reviewer's submission
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Baopu Shusheng commented
Watch the sea of rape flowers
Wang Jiquan
The spring wind does have merit, and the group painting does not need to be done.
The fast hand is dressed in the same color, and the mountains and rivers are full of rhubarb robes.
【Baopu Shusheng Comments】Popular fashion words into poetry but without losing interest, can be appreciated.
Canola flowers
Chen Chuming
Flowers smoke people in the late spring, the countryside wandered bitterly.
Poor ten miles of gold, not as good as the heavenly family.
[Baopu Shusheng comment] The two sentences are quite ironic and ingenious.
View canola flowers
Cui Dehuang
At first suspicion, there is a long gung falling here, and there is no wind to shine on the eyes.
The dragon robes of the past generations were spread out on the ground, and a thousand thangkas were stretched out to the sky.
Clouds can darken the morning sun, and there is no need for night and moon to enter the twilight.
Butterflies flew and sounded, and thin plumes interrupted the sound of falling flowers.
【Baopu Shusheng Comment】The middle two associations are broad, the metaphor is novel, and the sense of heaviness is not lost.
Tongnan Cauliflower Festival
Chen Rende
In February, the Tongnan Grand Festival opens, just like the fairy gathering in Penglai.
A moment of ladylike spirits, clear haze.
The grass is green across the sky, and the cauliflower yellow comes to the eyes.
Xitou has a guest who meditates for a long time, in order to cut the new poem.
【Baopu Shusheng commented】 "Grass color green over the sky, cauliflower yellow to the eyes", a far and a close, the contrast is clear, especially "green over", "yellow to" refining words are not bad, although the spoken language is not lost in elegance.
Linjiangxian Pengcheng early spring to see rape flowers
Lu Yumei
The wind and things are early in the past, and the sound and sound move the spring birds. The cauliflowers in the first ten miles of the city are deep. Moths divide into green feathers, and butterflies flutter gold.
The smoke waves were faint, and there was a cloud in sight. The heart of the old garden of the guests of the end of the world. Clearly like a landscape, two wet plackets.
【Baopu Shusheng commented】 "Clear landscape like, two or two wet clothes", a piece of nostalgia, gentle and deep, making people suddenly homesick!
Biography of the critic
Gao Shichun, self-proclaimed Baopu Shusheng. Consultant of Yunfan Poetry Friends Association.
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Zhou Xiangdong commented
Chu Jia Chong
Flowers in the wind and rain, bees turn butterfly dance for makeup.
The old man is humble and wears a bone, and gives up a few drops of incense in the world.
【Zhou Xiangdong Comment】From the beginning of the magnificent, turned to the shock. In contrast, it is even more touching!
Flower viewing joke
Xu Mid-Autumn Festival
Rapeseed is first yellow and fragrant dyeing clothes, and the sun is obliquely singing and singing.
The old wife was very angry with me, and the butterflies flew in front of me.
【Zhou Xiangdong Comment】The whole article is in order, fresh and witty. The knot seems to be turned out from the "stepping on the flowers to return to the horseshoe fragrance" painting, although it is wonderful but slightly deliberate.
Jiashen passed through the Dengfeng Jinling Coal Mine in April
Jiang Lan
Rape flowers bloom and ma lingxiang, and wheat rolls over the blue waves through Pinggang.
Who knows that there are three thousand feet under the feet, and the People of Si are busy with their mouths.
【Zhou Xiangdong comment】Lay out the nature, turn the knot to the heart, the masterpiece. Unfortunately, the knot seems to have nothing to do with rape flowers!
【Zhou Xiangdong commented】Late Tang Dynasty style, compassion for farmers and poverty, good use of contrast, complete structure, narrative nature, excellent works are undoubted.
【Zhou Xiangdong commented】The jaw connection is amazing, and the tail connection enters the realm of quiet and wonderful. With this diptych, this poem is enough!
The owner of Yushan Mountain, real name Zhou Xiangdong, born in 68, also known as Yushan Baoqinke, Zhai name MianLu. The calligrapher is from Mr. Wang Zhenduo of Yushan; the poetry teacher is from Mr. Wang Zhenkan of Gushang; Western painting and theory are studied by Mr. Wang Lin, and he is also good at new poetry, commentary, etc
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Lei Haiji review
Enjoy cauliflower flowers on the night homecoming road
Ding Xin
The name of the flower is not in the spectrum, and the flower hair is pressed and fragrant.
The evening color is still strong, and the sky is four wild yellow.
[Lei Haiji's comment] The first two sentences are extraordinary weather and rich in meaning. The name is not in the spectrum, and the flowers are pressed and fragrant. The nameless man overwhelms the crowd and is the real force. Heroes are nameless, and the real world is the real hero who is nameless and philosophical. The poem is written about rape flowers, focusing on human society, and is intended to be human affairs.
sketch
Liu Luning
The spring water is long with willow shadows, and the breeze sends the fragrance of cauliflower.
Who is sitting in the sound of the piano, watching the sunset through a small window?
[Lei Haiji commented] The poem writes out beauty, all-round beauty: the green beauty of spring wicker, the fragrance of rape flowers, the beauty of the music of the violin, the brilliance of the sunset, how beautiful is the person sitting in the piano? The sketches outlined throughout the poem are beautiful. The title of the poem is "Sketch", which can be described as the finishing touch, and a small poem is a sketch of beauty. Poetry with a strong sense of painting and room for imagination must be a masterpiece.
[Lei Haiji commented] This poem is exquisitely conceived, the focus of the poem is on jinling coal miners, not directly written but through the Jinling coal mine road in April. The first sentence writes rape flowers, the second sentence writes Wheat Wave, and the third sentence is transcribed at the foot, where someone is busy with rations three thousand feet below. The pulling out of the concluding sentence is very smooth, the lyrical nature, the content of the upper and lower couplets contrasts sharply and strongly, and the beauty of the upper link and the hard work of the lower link collide with the spark of the poem, which is dazzling and moving. A rare good poem.
【Lei Haiji comment】The poem is lively and fresh. Cleverly conceived, the magic is to compare the god of Si Chun to a painter, which will refresh the reader. The first two sentences are written about the god of Spring painting, and the last two sentences are painted with the color after the painting, a color of yellow, echoing the sea of rape flowers in the poem. Surprisingly, the sea of rape flowers is compared to "the mountains and rivers are full of rhubarb robes." "Accurately and graphically expresses the beauty and magnificence of the sea of rape flowers. This work shows the subtlety of Mr. Wang Jiquan's poetic thinking. Such thinking is derived from abnormal thinking, and when the thinking is written in the language of a poet, there are novel sentences. Poetic abnormal thinking is a necessary skill for poets, so my article "Abnormal Thinking Adds Charm to Poetry" won the National Poetry Excellent Paper Award.
Canal Pond Village to enjoy rape flowers
Zhou Shuzhi
Where the spring tour is not difficult, the golden ten miles follow the green mountains.
Fang Tian Yi Bian passed by the flowers, inhaling the fragrance and also nourishing the face.
【Lei Haiji comment】The upper link writes the big scene of rape flowers, "golden ten miles and green mountains", saying that there are many rape flowers. The next link writes about the feelings of facing so many rape flowers: "Inhaling the fragrance also nourishes the face." It can be seen that the canola flower is great, the air has become fragrant, people have become beautiful in the sea of flowers, the mood is better, then the living environment of people has also been optimized. The first sentence is a bit weak.
Out of the city to see the rapeseed flower mouth cham (outside one)
Safety East
It is easy to plant gold in the spring, and it is difficult to plant gold, and the dream of Wangli Ping domain is wide.
It is not that the farmhouse prefers color, some people look at it as a drawing.
Chongzhou tour to enjoy rape flowers
The reins of the tour indulged in long pursuit, and the greenery of Chongzhou gradually deepened in February.
Mo Daotian did not have private things, and kept a piece of gold for himself.
[Lei Haiji commented] These two poems use the word "no", "not the preferred color of the peasant family", "Mo Daotian is not a private thing", both of which create a majestic and strong atmosphere. Poetry can win with emotion, victory with intention, victory by scenery, victory by words, and what the ancient Fang family most admired was victory with qi. The seven tang dynasty scrolls recommended by famous artists are all victorious with qi. The Tang Dynasty Sikong Tu treatise on the twenty-four pins also put Xionghun in the first place. Therefore, I wrote a close-up article "Make Good Use of the "No" Character, And Poetry Adds Rhyme", which discusses the advantages and methods of using the "No" character brushwork, and includes it in the book "Selected Works of Lei Haiji".
Lei Haiji, pen name Zhuang Xishui, Jiangxi Jinxianren, military poet, poetry critic. He once served as a political commissar of a certain unit of the People's Liberation Army, with the rank of colonel, and his poetry essays were repeatedly selected for the National Chinese Poetry Seminar, the Chinese Military Poetry Seminar, and the Cross-Strait Chinese Poetry Forum. He is the author and publisher of "A Quick Introduction to Poetry", "Quotations from Ancient and Modern Famous Artists on Poetry", and "Discussion on the Creation of Good Poetry -- Selected Poems of Lei Haiji").
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What a review
【What a three comment】 The same is to see the flowers, everyone only sees the flowers in this life, only the king sees the flowers from the flowers in this life.
The canola flower festival is picked up
Segment dimension
Cauliflower sea for youth, full of golden eyes to help get rid of poverty.
Three or five big mothers compete for color, red scarf dance white gauze skirt.
【What a three comments】Capture close-up shots, carefully traced, and the picture sense is full. The entry point, focus point and foothold of writing poetry are very important, and Duan Brother is well versed in this way.
Han Kaijing
A wisp of east wind came last night, and it was difficult to guess only the Qing Emperor.
It is not found in the hundred gardens, but is opened in the farm land.
【How three comments】 The starting sentence is written a little apart, and the closing sentence says that cauliflower is different from Zhongfang, which is a round of pullback.
Admire the Jiangxi rape flowers
Lei Haiji
All the way to the shoulders draped in the morning glow, I followed the butterflies to see the golden flowers.
The camera is filled with New Year colors, and the ten miles back home.
【How three comments】Because the camera is full of spring colors, so the fragrance accompanies all the way, ten miles back home, still not dispersed, this feeling is not unique to the poet, but only the poet can say it.
[What a three comments] all say that poetry, calligraphy and painting are of the same origin, may wish to take this as an example to taste carefully. Spring water clings to it, willow shadows grow long, light wind blows hair, people sitting alone lean on the window to watch, in the sunset, the silhouette is beautiful and distinct, reading this poem is like looking at a painting.
Brother Jiang's poems are diluted and peaceful, the language is simple, can not be seen with the wind and moon language, and his pity for the hearts of the people, only the three words of "busy for the mouth" have been said.
Taiping Village
Ran Changchun
The willow line is jagged and the small pond is blown, and a large area of cauliflower yellow in front of the door.
The geese all the way to the east wind, but also learn the mountain ong to pace the sunset.
Brother Ran is good at depicting rural landscapes, and when reading this poem, "rice flowers say good years, listen to the sound of frogs", jumping out of his heart for no reason. The white-headed old man walked slowly and leisurely in the sunset spring breeze, the tender yellow goose, supporting the furry wings, followed by the old man, also swaying and pacing, the two postures are so similar. The selection of an idyllic and leisurely side of rural life leaves readers with a large amount of room for imagination and replenishment, which makes people full of fascination for the beautiful and peaceful rural life.
Youxinghua Qianduo Cauliflower Scenic Area is the second of three sentences
Yang Yiming
Who cut Hideno into thousands, rapeseed golden stacks fresh.
People are small poems bee honey, a moment of victory before drunken flowers.
"Who cut Xiuye into thousands", "People are small poems bee honey", Yang Gong is a poem, there are always sentences that are brilliant.
Dreams
The vast golden light is full of life, and the unpolished powder is full of affection.
Bees are also afraid of getting lost and do not go deep into the cauliflower.
[What a three comment] a word, real writing bees, fictitious writing tourists, pointing out that it is people who are really afraid of getting lost, so as to show that spring is as deep as the sea, and cauliflowers are in full swing, endless.
cauliflower
Hong Junmo
Rape blossoms are fragrant, and spring butterflies are chaotic and bee-mad.
At night, the incense is blown down into a shower, and it is suspected that Qiankun also swept away the yellow.
【What a three comments】Using the night wind to blow down cauliflower such as "sweeping away pornography and cracking down on illegality", even if it is novel and unique, it finally feels that it lacks beauty.
Yang Ziyi
Strict makeup smeared this shyness, and the stigma of the bottom matter was actually oiled.
All mistakes are useful, and the world only values the wind.
[What a three comments] "The world only weighs the wind and currents", aphorisms, read repeatedly, and the aftertaste is long.
Enjoy the rape flowers in the distant suburbs in the rain and sunshine
Semi-reclusive
After the rain, the sun is moving, and the cauliflower is yellow.
It is heavy with gold and a slightly warm fragrance.
Lustful fans of new butterflies, youth and wild fangs.
The villagers are fine, and the wine is drinking in the sun.
【What a three comments】The semi-hidden brothers practice words, are good at rendering, and emphasize syntax, which can be seen from this law.
【What a three comments】 "The dragon robe of the past generations is spread on the ground", brother Cui thought of it! At the moment when the cauliflower is in full bloom, the spring clothes are complete, and Brother Cui quickly calls for friends to lead companions and watch the dragon robes unfold!
The plane looked up and down at Qinghai
Star Man
The east refers to the golden city of good intentions, and the silver eagle carries me far away from the dust and sand.
Qingpu Qinghai Mat Grass, Yellow River RapeSeed Flowers.
The light fog still covers the snow of a thousand ridges, and the residual sun has sent half a day.
There are many masters in the past and the present, and I look down who can be called a painter.
【He Qisan comment】 "Qingpu Qinghai Mat Grass, Yellow Dye yellow River Rape Flower", just look at this link to know that this old fox is also a wild fox spirit.
He Qisan, a native of Susong, Anhui, a member of the Chinese Poetry Society and the Anhui Writers Association, the vice president of the Susong County Poetry Association, the vice chairman of the Susong County Writers Association, the deputy director of the Poetry Association committee of the China Natural Resources Writers Association, and the planner of the Yunfan Poetry Friends Association, has authored "Three Hundred Pieces of He Qi's Three Words" and "Three Hundred Pieces of He Qi's Three Absolute Sentences".
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Yao Quanming commented
【Yao Quanming Comments】Using the metaphor of the wing as a metaphor for people, this is three ambiguities.
[Yao Quanming comment] This scene is commonly seen, people often ridicule it, although this song is also ridiculed more warmly, if the "red scarf dance white gauze skirt" also. Warmth and generosity come, the poet is benevolent, and there is nowhere to "pick up the English".
【Yao Quanming Comment】Cauliflower is just a rising, "three thousand feet under the feet" square is where the crane is, and there is really divine power to help.
[Yao Quanming Comment] The poem is humorous, and the goose walking with its wings and the mountain ong pacing with its back hand is indeed similar to the god, but it is not related to the naughty heart. If it is not related to the purpose of elegance, why not be naughty when composing poetry.
[Yao Quanming's comment] One dares to overturn the case, even if the Heavenly Gong has to lie down with a gun; one is good at association and plants gold in the field. After some tossing and turning, the two give rise to new ideas.
【Yao Quanming Comment】Yong rape flower, inertial thinking often extends to vegetable oil and stops at vegetable oil, this first is indignant, far deep in its purpose, sincere cauliflower in the "angry youth" also. Yikes.
Yao Quanming, born in 1972, zhuo'an, is a poet written in Wuhan, Hubei Province. He is the author of "Xuan yincao in the lake", "Bamboo Laughter Collection", "Wang Xi's Line Book Collection Character Spring Lian", "Cao QuanBei LiShu Collection Character Spring Lian", "Yan Zhenqing Kai Shu Shu Zi Chun Lian", "Full Text Annotated Edition of The Ancestral Tablets (Ten Volumes)", etc., and edited "Contemporary Poetry Series", "Contemporary Poetry Hundred Family Library", "Tong Yun New Edition" and so on.
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