This afternoon, the 4th Hangzhou Primary and Secondary School Students' "My Spring Festival" Theme Essay Contest was held in the City Express Newspaper for on-site review.
A total of 94,910 submissions were received for this competition, and after several rounds of strict screening by the judging committee in the early stage, 1359 essays were shortlisted for the final on-site review.
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In the on-site review session of this competition, the Hangzhou Municipal Education Bureau invited 15 heavyweight experts, including front-line backbone teachers of primary and secondary schools, as well as experts from municipal and district teaching and research offices.
These teachers are all deputy senior titles, some teachers have participated in the middle school examination propositions for many years, and many teachers have rich experience in judging essay competitions. It can be said that each is a "big coffee" in the field of language and composition teaching, and has rich experience.
Judging is divided into elementary school group, junior high school group and high school group.
After the start, all shortlisted works are stored in each teacher's computer according to their numbers. In order to ensure the fairness and impartiality of the judging, the selection and scoring of the competition all adopt the form of "blind selection". For each essay faced by the teachers, the name of the school and the name of the student are hidden, and only the student's grade is retained for reference. Moreover, each essay is scored by multiple teachers.
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The theme of this year's competition is "My Spring Festival - Reading Good Books, Telling Stories, Continuing Traditions and Celebrating the New Year", and many students did read a few books during the holidays and wrote their feelings. More students talked about their hometown experiences, telling stories of family style and Spring Festival impressions.
Teachers judge in groups, and when they encounter good works, some people can't help but share the wonderful sentences in them. When you see a controversial article, you will also have a good discussion. A teacher said: "From nearly 100,000 submissions to the final review, it is not easy for each child, so the grading should be cautious and cautious, so that it is fair and fair to everyone." ”
The 6 teachers in the primary school group all praised a contribution that wrote a red envelope.
A teacher said: "You see, this submission wrote a red envelope in the fifties and sixties, it was a piece of red paper, and later there were all kinds of red envelopes with exquisite designs, and now, most of them are electronic red packets." Another teacher nodded in agreement and said, "The change of the times can be seen from a small red packet." The selection of materials is good, plus the text is also delicate and clean, which is a good article. ”
How to spend the Spring Festival, many children start from the theme of "eating", and some teachers joke that "the writing is good, and they are hungry when they look at it". However, if you want the article to be brilliant, careful selection of materials is always the first. There is a submission that does not write about eating and drinking, does not write about setting off firecrackers, but writes a plum blossom in front of the house, blooming in the cold wind, reminiscent of the anti-epidemic personnel who stick to the front line. "This kind of article is unforgettable." A teacher said.
When the six teachers of the junior high school collectively judged, there was a lot of debate and surprise. From time to time, a teacher said: "What kind of folklore this child wrote about, I don't know, it's really funny!" "I still have the folk customs of playing ponds here, and I don't know." They feel that such a topic gives children a chance to discover the beauty of tradition, which is particularly good.
Gao Li, a teacher at Hangzhou Senior High School who is a judge in the high school group, said: "The quality of this year's essay is high, which makes people shine. By the time you get to high school, the storyline alone is not enough, and the text has to keep up. Sometimes, an article can be impressive with a brilliant sentence, such as an article that says, "All childhood exploded in situ, breaking down into confetti and the smell of gun smoke." ”
The final results of this theme essay contest will be announced by the Hangzhou Municipal Education Bureau, and the lion who loves writing will also be released at the first time.
How about this year's submissions? Each of the judges and teachers has something to say, let's take a look.
Zhou Suying, Secretary of Hangzhou Jianlan Middle School:
The little authors can grasp some small incisions to express the Spring Festival memory, the Spring Festival complex and the Spring Festival culture. The article reflects several obvious characteristics, which are quite good: First, the spirit of participating in labor, many small authors participate in the production of lanterns, rice cakes, soup balls, etc., restoring many vivid life scenes. Second, it excavated many cultural traditions that we may not know much about today, showing the broad spirit of traditional Chinese culture. Third, children can pay attention to the current society, and the article combines current hot topics such as the New Year in situ, poverty alleviation, and comprehensive well-off.
Song Li, Principal of Dongcheng Middle School of Hangzhou Normal University:
Looking at the overall article, I feel that there are still many poetic children. Today's students are becoming more and more capable of mastering the written word. On the basis of having the ability to control words, if you can do the "festival" with me, look at the "festival" with me, and write out the feelings and cognition of the Spring Festival is a personalized and unique experience.
"Section" has me, which means that there is a sense of truth and reality, and the brushstrokes are delicate, rather than talking in generalities.
In the process of quoting ancient poems and famous works, I can connect my life experience with these poems and ancients from the past to the present, rather than simply grafting poems, celebrities, and famous works into my own articles.
When we write about the Spring Festival, we should not only describe what we did during the Spring Festival, but also string together the Spring Festival customs and our own feelings, and inherit and develop them.
Yang Shu, deputy director of scientific research of Hangzhou BaochuTa Experimental School:
The young writers of junior high school described their Impressions of the Spring Festival in detail, one dish after another, one custom after another, vividly and vividly showing the Spring Festival in various parts of their hometown. The second uses ingenious ideas to show the past and present, the ancestors and themselves, books and life in the Spring Festival, giving the Spring Festival the depth and thickness of different time and space. The three deficiencies are that they are too broad and hollow, some have nothing to do with the Spring Festival, and some only have a narrative of dragonflies and water, and lack flesh and blood details. In general, articles that can show the details of the New Year and have their own specific real experience of the Spring Festival are easy to impress people. A little smaller, a little thinner, a little more real, a little newer, is a good article.
Jin Ling, Faculty member of Xiacheng Teacher Education College:
Because of the promotion of the New Year in Hangzhou, this year's students' essay writing has been limited by the subject matter, but this is a double-edged sword, many students' essays focus on the Spring Festival in Hangzhou, written in "Zhejiang" for the New Year, but inspired the students to think more about the Spring Festival customs, traditional culture, and family affection.
For example, many students wrote about the contradictions and thoughts of staying in Hangzhou for the New Year, and found the New Year flavor that they could not find in their hometown in the past.
Some students wrote that they were a green brick in the Royal Street of the Southern Song Dynasty, looking at all kinds of people walking by, writing about how modern people celebrate the New Year, and writing about how people before them celebrated the New Year, with a unique perspective.
There are also students who write that they are a "Fu" character, wandering in traditional culture and modern life, appearing in classic books or modern books, and experiencing the taste of the Year...
Junior high school students, for writing spring leagues, dragon lanterns, cutting window flowers, painting door gods and other traditional activities, the production of Spring Festival food, such as wrapping spring rolls, playing rice cakes and other observation and description is very meticulous, and learned to link tradition and modern life, both with the taste of Jiangnan customs, reading is a kind of enjoyment. The "My Spring Festival" essay contest can not only improve students' writing ability, but also guide students to pay attention to traditional culture, which is very meaningful.
Wen Hong, Vice Principal of Hangzhou Qianjiang New Town Experimental School:
From the children's articles, you can feel the taste of the new year full of traditional culture. For example, the article mentions the Spring Festival, lion dance, paper cutting, Yue opera, as well as green plum wine, red lanterns, these materials have both local characteristics and cultural heritage.
The second thing that impressed me was that the article was very cleverly conceived. For example, there is an article that uses the first person to imagine itself as a "blessing" word, and uses this "blessing" word to explore the meaning of blessing, and writes from its own blessing to the blessing of the country, and the intention is also good. There is also a "Spring Festival of vesta", which writes that vesta god came to see 'my' home for the Spring Festival, and wrote the strong New Year flavor of the family from the perspective of vesta.
The third point is that the language is beautiful and charming.
There is an article about a clay pot of cured meat in the hometown, and the first sentence is extraordinary: "A corner of the home, sitting in a tank"; there is also an article about nostalgia, and the end of the article is endlessly evocative: "The Spring Festival has arrived, and the winter is over." Wen a pot of nostalgia, the mountains and rivers are unharmed, everything is safe. ”
There is also a small author who writes about Grandma cutting window flowers: "The metal blade glids like a snake on the red paper, drawing one perfect arc after another." The blade is pulled, the tip of the knife is picked, repeatedly staggered, and a beautiful pattern jumps on the paper, which is exquisite. "The wording is accurate and the description is delicate. It's a great work, and the taste of the year is endless!
Wang Wei, a teacher and researcher at the West Lake District Education Development Research Institute:
Essays that have their own real emotions in the article and can integrate their own views are easy to score higher and get the affirmation of the judges and teachers.
For example, there is an essay that mentions border defense soldiers, and the reason why there is a joyous Chinese red is because these border defense soldiers are carrying heavy loads for us. This is the most touching and distinctive thing about this article.
All the compositions look down, there are also some common problems, such as the language is very beautiful, but it has little to do with the Spring Festival; although the article has its own experience and feelings about the Spring Festival, there are more similarities in the selection of materials and structures.
Gao Li, Vice Principal of Hangzhou Senior High School:
The quality of this year's essay is very high, which is eye-catching. In addition to the skill of writing expression and the remarkable conception of articles, the contestants have done a good job of handwriting my heart, writing my life and the Spring Festival, and writing about the traditions and sense of the times of my hometown.
The content and focus of the essay are very open and diverse, allowing us not only to appreciate the different Spring Festival traditions of 11 cities in Zhejiang, but also to see the "New Year's taste" of Northeast, Henan, Hunan, Shaanxi and other parts of the country; not only show the rich details of eating, wearing, playing and sacrificing during the Spring Festival, but also show the high school students' attention to tradition and the times, inheritance and development.
At the same time, we also read out the high school students' concern for the epidemic, the concern of their families, the cherishing of the small and fortunate life, and the adherence to the feelings of home and country, so that we can see the confidence, pride and rich kindness of this generation of teenagers - this is what makes me more moved than the article.
Wang Huaqi, Secretary of Hangzhou No. 2 Middle School:
"My Spring Festival" theme essay, students have a lot of outstanding presentation, rich in style, poetry, prose, novels, each with beautiful text; lyrical, argumentative, narrative, and more wonderful. "I" stand at the time node of "Spring Festival", and in the face of the convergence of the annual rings, there will be a lot of thinking and sighing, especially in the face of the Spring Festival of the ugly year when the epidemic has not dispersed.
Judging from the students' compositions, there are three dimensions in the main body of writing ideas: one is "individual and society", "I" life growth and social changes; one is "inheritance and innovation", the inheritance of customs and cultural innovation; the other is "material and spiritual", the material experience of eating and wearing and the spiritual sublimation of family affection.
Chen Jie, Director of the Office of the Affiliated Middle School of Hangzhou Normal University:
From the high school students' attention to the Spring Festival, I saw that the students had a broad vision and a good grasp of the ability to closely follow the theme of the times. Under their pen, the local New Year has the opportunity to experience different Spring Festival customs in different places, not to gather in the context of the epidemic but to enjoy the warm continuation of online reunion brought by information technology, to the border soldiers who stuck to their posts and forged the national steel defense line when the whole country celebrated the festival, and to the solemn respect for the support teachers who wholeheartedly guarded the flowers of the motherland and gave up reunion with their families.
I also saw that high school students grasped the details of excavating the connotation of the Spring Festival, which was gratifying. In the ancestral worship ceremony in Spring, they will use the common reverence of the ancestors of three generations when they burn a pillar of incense to set up a spiritual linkage and deepen the profound meaning of home to the members; in ancient and modern literary works, the changes and inheritance of different customs and modern societies in ancient and modern literary works will express the rapid improvement of the quality of life in the change of the times and the beauty of the immortality of the national spirit.
Hu Jue, Chinese teacher at Hangzhou Shengli Experimental School:
The essays that participated in the selection were very good. Some essays, written around the change of a thing or the change of an old object, are impressive. For example, a classmate wrote a lantern, saying that it was a friend hanging under the eaves, and the image was vivid. There are also classmates who write about tickets, the way home, and the changes in currency, reflecting the theme of the Spring Festival from the changes. There are also students, the eyes of writing are aimed at the people and things around them, some students have written stories about the New Year at the police station, and people who still silently stick to their posts after the New Year are moving. There are also classmates whose compositions are full of warmth: Grandpa can't see the words of the mobile phone clearly, I help debug; I accompany my grandfather to walk home and so on... Such an essay like this, full of temperature.
In addition, in the essays, perhaps because of the New Year, there are many essays to eat and drink, and the number is large, and it is difficult to stand out. Some essays that carefully observe life and feel life can move people more.
Wang Jin, a Chinese teacher at the primary school affiliated to the Hangzhou Institute of Educational Sciences:
In the review of these articles, I found that some children are very good at finding out the difference between our current new year's taste and the previous year's taste, and can use childlike language to write out these differences very graphically, for example, there is an article, from the red paper package 50 years ago, the red packet from 30 years ago and the red packet sent by WeChat to the present, through the change of the red packet to write about the changes of the times, the idea is very new, and it is very childlike.
In addition, some children's articles can jump out of the theme of "eating" that children like very much, and they are very skilled. For example, there is an article about pork head meat, which is a very folkloric theme, but a close reading of the description has our traditional cultural heritage in it, which will be more meaningful than other flat and straightforward articles.
Chen Qing, Vice Principal of Hangzhou Mingde Primary School:
The overall feeling is that the overall level of the students in this essay contest is relatively high, and they can closely follow the theme of the essay, and write a strong New Year flavor from the laughter and laughter, pots and pans. The range of materials selected is also relatively wide, there are eating, drinking and fun, there are people who are sophisticated, there are great changes in the hometown, and there are the embodiment of the different lives of generations of grandchildren. It can be seen that our children's eyes are not only on the side, but also on the society, seeing the elders who are still working hard during the Spring Festival, the couriers, doctors, sanitation workers who are still left behind during the Spring Festival...
Some children's language is too adult, lacks childlike fun, can not truly reflect the children's innocent and lovely childhood life, there will be a stylized feeling. And some children write very interestingly, the year is hidden in the crackling sound, hidden in the trunk of different but contains love... Children's essays should use children's language, write about children's lives, and express children's emotions.
Ma Aili, assistant principal of Hangzhou Xinhua Experimental Primary School:
The overall feeling is that the quality of the article is very high, the subject matter is wide, there are stories of the Spring Festival, the changes of the Spring Festival, and objects related to the Spring Festival, but there are very few articles related to the Spring Festival. When we are judging, we will pay special attention to such articles, so it is very important to write an essay to read clearly the theme and make a choice of the scope of the study. Also, how do you stand out from the crowd of similar articles? Personally, I think that a good topic is a stepping stone, and a new and distinctive topic will attract the reader's desire to read the article for the first time. In addition, in addition to the wonderful language expression, the ingenious article conception and idea are also good pluses. We must be good at seeing the big from the small things, reflecting the deep meaning contained in them, reflecting our own sense of truth, touching the reader's heart with our own true feelings, and leaving the reader with the Spring Festival - the Spring Festival is not only happy, harmonious, and reunited, but also warm, warm and touching.
Hu Xiaofang, Chinese teacher at Hangzhou Changjiang Experimental Primary School:
The students' essays are well written, much better than their usual work. Many students have achieved novel angles and ideas when writing. Some students from sitting on their father's shoulders, writing on their backs, and then leaning on their shoulders, write about the passage of time, write about the changes of the times, see the big in the small, very infectious.
In the language of writing, many students maintain innocence and childlike fun, and it is very tasteful to read. For example, some students write to accompany grandpa to fiddle with the Internet mobile phone, the Spring Festival ancestor worship of the two generations of interesting dialogue, write their own red envelopes to parents and mothers, the language is maintained in the true temperament style of primary school students, see the child's innocent and innocent composition, really make people's eyes light up.
However, the students' essays also have some places that can be done better, such as many students have not been able to open up their writing ideas, the composition theme focuses on the Spring Festival cuisine, the selection of materials is a bit similar, such essays are not easy to shine.
Hangzhou Anji Road Experimental School Chinese Teacher Fu Xuying:
Overall, the composition of primary school students is closely related to the theme, rich in content, and smooth in writing. Some essays are novel and have unique ideas, which is not easy.
For the essay contest, the first is to focus on the "intention", and the selection of materials should be novel. The same selection of materials is prone to aesthetic fatigue. No one has me, people have me new, and people are new and I am exquisite. This requires a rich life and a novel perspective, such as a small author taking the voice of the year as a clue, from the small family to everyone, and playing the symphony of the year. The second is the deliberation of "words", some articles and languages are full of childlike fun, such as writing a trunk full of love in an anthropomorphic way throughout; some articles are poetic and fresh.
The list of judges of the 4th Hangzhou Primary and Secondary School Students" "My Spring Festival" Theme Essay Contest
Zhou Suying
Hangzhou Jianlan Middle School
Song Li
Dongcheng Middle School of Hangzhou Normal University
Yang Shu
Hangzhou Baochu Pagoda Experimental School
Golden Bells
Lower Town Teacher Education College
WenHong
Hangzhou Qianjiang New Town Experimental School
Wang wei
West Lake District Education Development Research Institute
high interest
Hangzhou Senior High School
Wang Huaqi
Hangzhou No.2 Middle School
Chen Jie
The Affiliated Middle School of Hangzhou Normal University
Hu Jue
Hangzhou Victory Experimental School
Wang Jin
Primary School Affiliated to Hangzhou Institute of Educational Sciences
Chen Qing
Hangzhou Mingde Primary School
Ma Ellie
Hangzhou Xinhua Experimental Primary School
Hu Xiaofang
Hangzhou Yangtze River Experimental Primary School
Fu Xuying
Hangzhou Anji Road Experimental School