Essay "On the way to school" what to write
Text/Lu Shengzuo
Three points:
1. Three beginnings
2. Analyze them
3. Two assignments
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Last time, I analyzed a sick essay "On the Way to School", so that students can feel the logical relationship between sentences in the composition, and the sentences written should be reasonable and reasonable, and make sense according to the front and back.
This time, I wrote an essay with the same title, "On the Way to School", which was arranged last time. You can write anything, as long as it "makes sense".
On the four words "on the way to school", I did a little analysis, emphasizing that the four elements are tied together, do not look at time, place, people and events in isolation. "On the road" is a place, or understood as a journey, in the countryside or in the city; "going to school" is a small background and a character action; the character is "I", written in the first person; what is the event? Find the material yourself.
I thought that I was in the fourth or fifth grade, and I didn't know how many times I had walked to school, and there was always something worth writing. Even writing down a normal day on the way to school is enough to complete an essay.
As a result, students still feel that there is nothing to write about. The writing knowledge I talked about before has also been returned to me.
Example 1:
A student begins like this:
I asked: "Early morning" can be written differently?
He replied: Morning.
I asked: In the morning?
He replied: Oh no, well...
I asked: What about the picture? What about the "proof" that was said?
He replied: Oh, got it.
Example 2:
A student begins with this transition:
The various problems in paragraph (1) will not be mentioned, but two good points are good: one is that people are in the background, and the other is that space has an order.
Is the transition in paragraph (2), "at this time", clearly expressed? When? What is the sense of picture?
Modification: (1) The sky seems to have been washed, and when you look around, you can't find a white cloud. The sun was shining directly on the ground, very warm, and it was a very sunny day. I walked down the road, carrying my school bag to school. Cars sped by one, shouting loudly in the trees, and a small bird flew in the sky, chirping, and hid in the green of the camphor tree in front of it.
(2) When I walked under the camphor tree, I suddenly heard a faint sound, but suddenly the sound disappeared again...
Example 3:
How to evaluate it? It's a "one-size-fits-all", a piece of crap, and it doesn't make sense. If you have to say something good, of course, it can also be understood as interacting with the reader, a bit of a sense of presence.
What is written in "On the Way to School"
Is the road to school, in the countryside, or in the city? The composition varies greatly depending on the location.
School, in the morning, or at noon, or at night?
Is the weather sunny, rainy, snowy, or cloudy?
Spring or summer, autumn or winter?
Walking to school? Cycling to school? Taking the bus to school? Mom or Dad driving to school?
Writing is, of course, a good choice. Things happen every day on the way to school. It's just that, in the eyes of students, these things are not worth writing about. I often say that it is not special to write, but to write special. Life doesn't have so many earth-shattering events, some are just ordinary. But even if it is ordinary, as long as you feel it with your heart, it is also delicious.
Write people, of course.
Writing scenery, also very good. Spring is coming, and it's a sight all the way.
Writing, too.
What you see and hear on the way to school can be written.
Solve what to write, and then improve how to write. Otherwise, it is difficult for a woman to cook without rice.
Writing "On the Way to School", you can write "An Unforgettable Person", "An Unforgettable Thing", "Lessons", "Collecting Gold", "Discovering Spring", "Three-legged Dog", "An Accident", "The Red Scarf Is Gone", "Helping Others"...
Assignment 1: 345 words
On a sunny day, I walked with my dad on the way to school...
I walked around the leaves and felt very bored. Suddenly, I had a stroke of genius and came up with a game that was to step on the leaves. This game is not limited to the number of people, you can step on it by yourself, compare yourself to yourself; you can also step on it by multiple people and compare it with each other; you can compare the number of people at the same time, and you can also compare the same number with time.
Sometimes I hit things, sometimes I bumped into people, sometimes I didn't even notice when I got to school. Once, I stepped on a bug that scared me and screamed. However, it turned out that the bug was dead. This makes me feel relieved, otherwise I wouldn't have to be scared half to death?
While stepping on the leaves, I also did not forget to enjoy the view. Blue sky, the golden yellow sun shining. Everything grows, and the whole world is full of life. Birds sing in the branches. Animals run through the forest. Children playing at school.
Sometimes, I also meet my classmates, or good friends. We said hello and went to school happily together.
This is my beautiful and happy way to school.
Assignment 2: 492 words
I sat in the classroom, thinking about what happened on my way to school.
The sky was blue, the sun seemed to be embedded in a golden plate, and the leaves swayed with the wind. Sitting on the battery car, I was in a good mood.
Just as I was enjoying the beautiful weather, my mother suddenly stopped. I was anxious and asked, "Why don't you leave?" No red lights! Mom shook her head, sighed, and said, "Alas, the battery car is out of power!" "I froze. The warm sun seemed to be covered by clouds, and the cold wind whistled in my ears, thinking: What can I do now? Late, not only to deduct points, but also to punish the station! There are no shops in front of the village, not only no buses, but also no taxis, this is the end!
Mom sat in front of her, very calm. After five minutes or so, Mom broke the silence and said, "Or let's go over!" It's not far from the school, and it only takes ten minutes to walk, and it should be too late. I said, "Yeah, I didn't think of this idea!" Quickly mentioning the heart in his throat, he finally let go.
I walked with my school bag on my back, but instead of slowing down much more than usual, I saw walking to school as a whole new experience. (You can write a little more experience here)
We didn't know how long we walked, but finally we came to the school gate. I looked down at my watch, and there were still eight minutes left before the morning reading class! I excitedly said "goodbye" to my mother and thought: If my mother had not thought of this method, I might have been at the penalty station!
The accident that occurred on the way to school this time made me learn a truth: don't panic when encountering things, as long as you think calmly, you can always think of a way.