I am an ordinary lover of poetry. In September 2020, I had the chance to climb the small building and found that it was an excellent platform for learning poetry. In particular, Xiao Lou's "Weekly Jade Test" column, learning from the wonderful comments of the guests, is very enlightening and beneficial.
From September 2020 to 2021, for more than a year, I tried to submit articles to Xiao Lou, published 3 personal albums, and published dozens of poems in the "Xiao Lou Weekly" column, of which 10 were commented on by guests, which was not only a good learning guide for me as a beginner, but also a great encouragement and encouragement.
In response to Xiao Lou's initiative, I have compiled 10 poems commented by Xiao Lou guests over the past year into a series to thank all the commenters, thank you for the hard work of Xiao Lou's editors, and also a memorial for their learning and exchange on the Xiao Lou platform for more than a year.
I sincerely wish that the "Little Building Listening to Rain Poetry" platform will be better and better!
Wang Zhengning
Published: January 3, 2021
【Poetry Collection Review】
Wangjiang Nan Lidong
Autumn will pass, and the remnants will be obliquely to the west. The mountains ascend and look up, the dan maple melts into the sky, and the frost leaves win the spring flowers.
The heart is not old, there is no need to sigh the years. In winter, a volume of books around the stove, leaning on the window to add fire to taste poetry tea, with the dream to the end of the world.
Mr. Liao Guohua commented: A picture of the handover of autumn and winter, as in the present, reflects a kind of leisurely emotion.
Winter solstice reminiscences of the red leaves of Wushan Mountain
In the dream, there has always been a concern for many years, and the autumn leaves are unique and fresh in winter.
New makeup goddess can comb it? Therefore, the Dao Cai Xia should be full of heaven.
People are like the sea at the peak of the peak, and the water at the bottom of the boat is like smoke.
Do not argue that yesterday's autumn light is good, proud of the cold wind exhibition of painting notes.
Mr. Chen Rende commented: The whole poem focuses on a reminiscence, the first sentence points out the concern, and then the recalled scene is brought together one by one, which is fascinating. The jaw joint closely follows the characteristics of Wushan Mountain, can be combed, should be full of heaven, and bear the worries. The neck joint is extremely beautiful, like a picture scroll. The tail link is properly tightened.
Revisit the Little Three Gorges
The red leaves fluctuate with the rainbow, and the scenery on both sides of the strait comes to the face.
Every time the water returns to the mountains, the painting screen is opened again.
Mr. Shen Libin commented: The depiction is meticulous, and the scenery is all in the poem. Three or four sentences come from the land tour "mountains and rivers are doubtful and there is no way, willows are dark and flowers are bright and another village", but they have their own novelty. On land and on the water, when the "mountains and rivers are restored", the new scenery gives people a different feeling, and if it can be accurately expressed in verses, it can get a good work.
Mr. Lou Lijian commented: Yang Wanli's poem "is entering the circle of ten thousand mountains, and a mountain is letting go of a mountain." "It's the difficulty of writing down the mountain." The painting screen is newly opened one page" is written by the visual impact brought by "water and mountains". Different angles, different moods. Poetry is not sharp, but it is also fluent. It's just that the word "revisited" in the title is not taken care of.
Gele Mountain in search of plums
The mountain path is full of wet moss, and the dark incense wanders for a long time.
The plum tree blossoms well, and I come again in the cold winter.
Mr. Ah Li commented: A very good sentence, but the "seeking" word in the title is not reflected in the poem, and the poetic expression of any mountain seems to be OK, not a song of music.
Boat trip to the mountains and countryside canola flowers
A pen protrudes into the spring light, and the green mountains on both sides of the strait are long.
The willows sway with the wind and the green water, and the cauliflowers are dyed yellow.
Mr. Zhang Qingkai commented: Very dynamic, picture sense. The background color is "spring light", green, dai, green and yellow are exhausted, bright and distinct, and the whole article wins with color. It's worth it.
Grave sweeping for parents
The rain and fog cover the mountain road obliquely, and one side of the bluestone is separated by the end of the world.
Every year, the most destructive day is the day of the intestines, and the wind of the tong is listening to the falling flowers.
Mr. Wang Hailiang commented: Life is a lifetime, grass and trees are autumn. "Standing tong wind listening to falling flowers", lyrical scenery, more deep affection.
The campus night stroll follows the incense meets the gardenia
Like snow in the moonlight, the stars are full of trees.
The encounter is also led by the wind, and the dark fragrance is not only a plum blossom.
Mr. Zhang Qingkai commented: In the sea of gardenia flowers, it is like "under the snow and moonlight", and the flashback brushwork lays out the scene, saving enough energy for the turning. However, the gardenia "edge wind" rises, just not the floating "dark", "dark incense is still plum blossoms"! Does the author think so?
The mountain residence tower overlooks the distance
The terrace looks at the mountain day by day, drunk to see the flow of xia to go and return.
Wildflowers were planted in the window, as if they were blooming among the white clouds.
Mr. Shen Libin commented: The first sentence is clear, open the door to see the "mountain", and the second sentence inherits the beautiful scenery seen from afar. The second sentence uses "wildflower" as a new perspective, which makes people unclear. The concluding sentence, on the other hand, was cleverly conceived, that is, the third sentence was explained and the topic was pointed out again. The whole poem is interesting and tasteful.
Ju Beacon Mountain Chant
Late years of hidden countryside, idle in Beacon Hill.
Let the sky make the paper, smear among the clouds.
Mr. Zhang Qingkai commented: Yong Beacon Mountain, and focus on the pen.
Seeing Huan Ding You' mid-autumn day due to illness and being admitted to the hospital alone in the rain
A sweet fragrance in the cold, the center of the moon. Stir up all the trees in the world and make them fragrant.
Flowers splashed tears, fell one after another, and stared at them for a long time. How many sorrows and joys are hidden at this time?
Lonely Mountain Meiyu Ms. Comments: This little song should be sent out in response to the feeling, the essence of the concept, the meaning of puns. The poet thought of walking alone under the hospital laurel tree in the rain of illness, so the whole theme and atmosphere of Yong Gui were shrouded in sentimental and life thoughts, which was very consistent with the personal mood at that time. Shang yan writes that the guanghan gui fell into the human world to bring the double image of fragrance and flower splashing tears, and the origin of the osmanthus flower and the xiangyu dancing at the same time paved the way for the next film to overlay the context. The film and the knot of the next one smoothly bear the scene of flowers splashing tears in the clouds in front of them, and when they gaze at the gui in the midst of illness, the protagonist can't help but express the sorrow and joy of the world. The closing three-word sentence "At this time" is still and moving, outlining the various unknowns (blank) before the generation of sorrow and joy, with a different mood and deep thinking.
Wang Zhengning is a native of Chongqing, a teacher, and a lover of poetry.
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Published: January 2, 2022
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