Since July 2018 to now, I have hardly interrupted the submission of articles to Xiaolou Weekly.
"Xiaolou Weekly" is the main column of the "Xiaolou Listening to Rain Poetry" platform, as a high-end platform in the contemporary classical poetry industry, I have admired it for a long time! I am proud to be able to publish my work on this platform. In the past three years, I have had the honor of publishing more than 100 works in Xiaolou Weekly and other special columns, and some of my works have been commented by special guests in Xiaolou's "Weekly Jade Test" column. Whether it is praise or flaws, for me, it is sincere attention and care, but also great encouragement and encouragement.
The content that I published in Xiaolou (2021) and received comments from special guests is compiled into a compilation to express my respect for the painstaking work of the guest teachers and also to express my gratitude to the public account of Xiaolou Listening to Rain Poetry Journal for providing a display platform.
Fan Dongxue
Published: January 2, 2021
【Poetry Collection Review】
Wild tune
The deserted village is full of poetry, and the strange fence is everywhere.
As soon as Xin XinXin's sparrow called, it sounded like Wing Chun words.
Ying Zi commented: This is definitely not casually written, but it shows the cleverness of the author's layout arrangement: the first two sentences of discussion, first suppressed and then raised, from denial to affirmation, indicating that deserted villages can also find poetry, and "strange on the fence every time they get it", which not only expresses their obsession with poetry, but also kicks back the "wild" word of the title. The turning knot reflects the joy of the heart with the sound of the bird, and also shows the truth that "the poem is both from nature and a portrayal of the state of mind". All things are spiritual, and we must be good at listening to the sounds of nature and understanding with our hearts in order to write good poetry.
Untitled
Behind closed doors, he was deaf and deaf, and he practiced chanting chanting in the face of the wall.
If there is a poem into the sogou, hugh half a sentence with the same person.
Lei Haiji commented: The poem shows the attitude of writing poetry extremely seriously and obstinately seeking innovation, not only closing the door to thank guests, facing the wall and groaning bitterly, but also using new tools to get online correction to see if there is anything the same as people, to achieve everyone's heart, everyone's pen is nothing. He promoted his poetic views in a vivid and interesting way.
Miscellaneous
Even if there is poetry and far away, the dust and smoke are too desolate.
When people always want to empty the mountains, are they not afraid of the empty mountains and tigers and wolves?
Jiang Heyou commented: Throw out the paradox, sharp but real, there is nowhere to escape, helpless.
See the sea of rape flowers
Katsuri ascends to the observation deck, and the golden flowers bloom.
My heart was inexplicably moving, and the great beauty came from the common.
Ge Yong commented: The discussion at the end is exquisite, but the front is not enough.
Cold food
Cold food is falling in the rain today, and there is light thunder in the sound of dripping.
The heavens should be afraid of burning mountain fires, and there are still many mesons in this world.
Zhang Qingkai commented: Ending with "positive energy", the intention is fixed, but it is too qualitative. If you refer to the stock market "bearish" and "bullish" theory, Yishi "bullish" meson push, then it is not a knot method.
Yang Hua
The heart is full of joy and love into the poet's romance.
May the kings mention me, and Hugh will embellish the wateriness.
Duan Wei commented: The concluding sentence is similar to the reversal method, which justifies the name of "watery Yanghua", which is a little interesting.
Magpies
It has become accustomed to following the mainstream, and the chirping is trying to show the throat.
Deeply aware of the world's preferences, only report good news and do not report worries.
Ling Zexin commented: Excuse magpie, needle depreciation of the times, irony and metaphor, and goodwill criticism of the current small number of people and things who are accustomed to reporting good news and not worrying, which is of positive educational significance.
Talk about certain "authority figures"
Learn how to be too true, and the eyes of the heavenly hands are better than the gods.
Get some books in your arms and let the title scare people first.
Guiqiao comments: The language is popular, and irony is seen in ridicule.
Self-deprecating
The new crown plague is uncertain, how dare you loosen the control and prevention.
A self-fashioning health code, looking at the flowers is also timid red and yellow.
Chen Tingyou commented: When the language is in poetry, the magic use is good.
Enter the vegetable garden
The sycamore is diligent and boastful, and the garden vegetables jump and squeeze the fence.
The old man is not a flirt and loves to see the pepper eggplant flower.
Guiqiao commented: "Garden vegetables jump to squeeze the fence," "jump" and "squeeze" collocation, strengthen the "garden vegetables" flourishing, so that the whole poetic mood is full of vitality. "Love to see the pepper eggplant flower" is not only a supplement to the lushness of vegetables in the garden, but also reflects the simple taste of the poet who is "not a sentimental guest".
Liu Luning commented: Poetry is true, people are real, so cute.
Mother's Day reflections
It seems that the dream life is long, and how many good times have been.
I am looking back on happy things today, and I am most in love with my mother at home.
Jiang Lan commented: Poetry is touching, but it has not achieved a touching effect. Just like the shaking baggage in crosstalk, the baggage is done, the result is not shaking, but directly lit up, lack of peak circuit rotation process, can not achieve the effect of making people smile. Therefore, how to write poetry is still very important, not to say a good poetry directly, to say it well, it will be worth others to taste repeatedly.
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Whoever is a little fart, before dry milk smells on the stage.
In this group of village children in front of you, there should be talents through heaven and earth.
Zhang Qinghui commented: The poem is close to spoken language, and it is pleasant to read. However, after a hundred years of suffering in our country, we pray more to the "heavens and the earth", and the joke has nothing to do with poetry.
Awkward
The pen tube has not been opened for a long time, and I pick up every cheek today.
After years of habit as a keyboard player, the word can not be written to the tip of the eyebrow.
Guiqiao comments: The ending sentence is vivid, inadvertently raising a realistic problem of the impact of the keyboard era on Chinese character writing, giving people a warning.
Duan Wei commented: Sometimes writing poetry does not require any skills, and writing can make people smile, which is good poetry.
Zhang Yingzhong commented: Nowadays people are used to typing on the keyboard, and rarely write, so that familiar words cannot be written. The poem captures this phenomenon and is interesting to write. The first three sentences pave the way, the last sentence says the original meaning, and does not say the "word" until the end, and has patience.
Jiang Heyou commented: Forget the words with the pen, today's people are normal, are the poets all keyboard nuye? Sigh.
Autumn
In the heat of the summer, cicadas sing willows.
The club was taken over by Qiu qiu and handed over today.
Guiqiao commented: "The furniture was taken over by Qiu, and today the office was handed over." "It reads fresh and unconventional. The new word into the poet must also be in harmony with the environment created.
What a third comment: the language is plain and straightforward, better than the whimsical ideas.
Akino idled
At this time, it is time to be sad, but the harvest scene is full of eyes.
The old man does not abide by the rules of poetry and wants to write happiness into autumn.
Zhang Qingkai commented: Subjectively setting the "poetic rules" of "Yong Sorrow", reflecting the joy of writing the harvest of autumn. It is also known as "writing mourning with a happy scene, writing music with a mournful scene, and seeing its mourning more and more" also.
Chu Baozeng commented: The case of turning autumn has been in ancient times, and it is difficult to play a miracle effect. The author of the poem is an "old man", not a young adult and can be so to the autumn, is a different capital from the crowd, admiration!
During the National Day, on a sunny day, farmers are harvesting rice
Golden Week has nothing to do with me, and farming is not idle.
The festival has not forgotten the croppers, and will also celebrate the fields.
Zhang Qingkai commented: The new perspective of "Golden Week" is positively correlated, but "idle" has nothing to do with it. That's the way it should be.
Title Fish Buddha to View
Bao Xiang sat solemnly on the water's edge, with compassion for the golden scales.
But the thing in the pool is hesitant, is it a greedy angler?
Zhang Qinghui commented: Borrowing the picture of the fish Buddha to look at, satirizing the world of lack of trust, the intention is very good, and it is also achieved.
Liu Luning commented: The sentence is written quite humorously, and the pen is busy; thinking deeply, it is more philosophical and profound. Thumbs up!
Under the old locust tree
When Acacia learned children's songs, the story often listened to The Wolf Grandmother.
Today I also came to sit down and talk only about who makes more money.
Lou Lijian commented: A tree can witness the direction of the wind. The author takes the reader to the alley, sets a simple corner in the flat straight narrative, and then exits the scene himself, letting the reader enter, with a hint of cunning in reality.
Yang Chenghu commented: Using contrasting techniques to borrow the same old locust tree to lament the changes in the world, exquisitely conceived, a good secular style painting!
Zhang Qinghui commented: It is very good to melt the memories of the years and the world without feeling violating the peace.
Watch the sunset
Enjoy the twilight, the heart is romantic.
A round of sunset red, I should look at the morning sun.
Lonely Mountain Plum Rain Review: The closing sentence is not lacking in lyricism, but it is a little disregard for the sense of direction also. The sun is setting downwards, the sun is rising, the same splendor, two kinds of destinations. If both are salted duck yolks, the direction and destination do not matter... But from the metaphysical pattern, the poet's perception is not without falling or rising, rising is falling, or is there death in life, and there is life in death? The so-called extremes of things must be reversed, and all things are constantly transformed.
Taste the other shore of ruoxian township, every assured boat to go on a long voyage.
The more ancient it is to reach the present, the more ahead there is.
Tan Wenbiao commented: The connection between the closing sentences is slightly unsmooth, the more ancient and the present is time, and the more in front of the front, more refers to space. The whole poem is not in the pen.
Osmanthus flowers
Light yellow scattered yu fen, release me autumn cold.
Especially happy to go to the late night, for people to incense dreams.
Lonely Mountain Plum Rain Review: The artistic conception is idyllic and empty, and it has a poetic taste. The first two sentences are scattered and interpreted, and the primary and secondary and interactive relationships of the main and object roles are seen: "Light yellow scatters yufen, release my autumn thoughts cold". A knot of "dreaming of incense for people", helping people from the perspective of flowers, makes a guixiang aesthetic activity completely anti-guest-oriented. wonderful!
Seeking the old
Romantic love has not been locked, often turn to the left of the photo album coffee table.
The old times looked to this, and I could meet my youth and youth.
Lonely Mountain Plum Rain Review: Nostalgic mood portrays nature. Revisiting old photos or looking for the me of youth, or the unfulfilled romantic call? The language is plain and evocative.
Fan Dongxue network name Xiangbei cultivator, Hunan Yueyang Linxiang people, half farmers and half merchants, absolute sentence lovers.
Editor's Note:
When I saw that the poet Friend Mr. Fan Dongxue had compiled all his review works from the beginning of the building to the present, I was both relieved and felt that I had not done a good enough job. At the end of each year, I do the poetry annual collection of each teacher and friend, but I never thought of taking time to sort out the review works of Xiao Lou's teachers and friends.
From now on, if Xiao Lou's poets have time and interest, as long as your works have been selected and published by Xiao Lou's guests, there are more than five poems, please collect them to us. At the same time, I also implore you to write down your own story with Xiao Lou, point out the shortcomings of Xiao Lou, and put forward your suggestions, so that we can better grow the platform of "Xiao Lou Listening to Rain Poems".
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Published: January 2, 2022
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