Introduction: Where does the poetic "taste" of poetry come from? In addition to rhyme, it depends on the fluency of the verse
First look at the previous issue of the Feishan poem to 1479 uplink:
Coconut wind has love only southern Cantonese
See which friends have a good sentence:
@Wind Flower Snow Night 1001
Coconut wind has love only south Guangdong, pine snow pure love is northern.
The cape is constantly cutting, and the love goose is busy.
In the end, "geese are busy" too "hard" and too far-fetched, where does the poetic "taste" of the poem come from? In addition to rhyme, that is, the fluency of the sentence, the more fluent, the stronger the poetry; on the contrary, a stuck shell, the poetry taste disappears. When we study poetry, writing kung fu is the first basic skill, and it is absolutely impossible to write a good poem without making the sentence through. Since this poem mentions "geese", it is better to take "geese" as the theme:
The coconut wind has love only the south of Guangdong, and the goose array is affectionate to the north;
The two places are constantly separated, and the end of the world is home.
@Leisurely elegant 61482192175
Snow in the North
Coconut wind has love only southern Guangdong, pine snow amorous look at northern Xinjiang.
Jade made of wall bricks and silver tiles, full of dazzling.
The last two sentences are difficult to hook up with the snow scene if you don't look at the title, and besides, the last three sentences have little to do with the first sentence, which is also the failure of the poem.
@ White water a cup 9875
"Praise for the Hong Kong-Zhuhai-Macao Bridge"
Coconut wind has love only south Of Guangdong, and clear water is amorous in the bay.
The 100-mile long bridge bears the sun and the moon, and the miracle of heavenly work falls.
If the last sentence is done neatly, it seems that it can further increase the correlation between the upper and lower levels: the rainbow of seven faces falls on the world.
Look at the picture proposition poem "Caiyun Gui":
"The Return of the Clouds"
Where do the fluttering clouds go? Only to see the northern geese flying in the sky.
Guiyue is still looking at it, and there seems to be a rainbow of clouds on the side of the mountain.
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The protagonist of the first sentence is "cloud", the last sentence is still "cloud", which is obviously a repetition, "only see" and "ba eye look" seem to have contradictions, the first two sentences suggest: fluttering and sprinkling rain, it is difficult to see the north geese flying in the sky.
Well, it's time for me to make up the sentence, first of all, the sentence syntactic poem:
Sentence: Coconut wind has love only Nanyue, pingping 仄仄平平仄
Pair of sentences: Li Yuzhong lusts to drift north. Ping Ping Ping Ping Ping
Sentence transfer: The water pavilion seems to smell the taste of chaoshan and the servants are flat and flat
Sentence: Tulou sounds like a Hakka hoop. Ping Ping Ping Ping Ping
I am a native of Hunan, I have only lived in Guangdong a few times, I know very little about the customs of Southern Guangdong, and only with limited knowledge, I repay the first fan province - Guangdong's love for me! The second big fan province is Shandong, but unfortunately I have never been there, it is really unrequited!
Drifting, 箫, Ping Shui rhymes under the flat two Xiao.
The water pavilion seems to smell the smell of Chaoshan and the tulou is like a Hakka hoop; the picture comes from the Internet
Caiyun gui, picture from the network
"Seven Absolutes" rainbow returns
The east wind is tied into Luo Wei, and the ping ping is flat
Butterflies fly on the grass. Ping Ping Ping Ping Ping
It's spring again, and the servants are flat
When will the good people return? Mediocre and mediocre
帏, flying, returning, flat water rhymes with five micro.
Xueyun Meixiang opened twice, and the picture came from the network
Dreamy idyll, pictures from the web
Well, take a look at today's outlink:
Shanglian: Xueyun Meixiang opened twice, and The servants were flat and flat
Lower link: Ping Ping Ping Ping
Look at the picture as a propositional poem "Dream Pastoral", the title can be deleted and modified according to the meaning of the picture, no limit to rhyme, five and seven can be absolutely.
Looking forward to the wide participation of friends and friends!
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