An excellent full-score essay should be "rich in details", both rich and appropriate.
But for a child who only has one sentence, you must first teach him: how to write enough details to support an essay.
Let's tell a story.
Be friends with your child and listen carefully to what your child has to say
[Red face]: Mom, the teacher asked us to write an essay on "learning a life skill", and I wanted to write "Omelette".
[laughs]: Okay! Write "Omelette", the theme is good! You can not only sort out your own omelette experience, but also teach your classmates the experience of ometry~
[red face]: But I don't know what to write, isn't it just "crack the egg in the pan and fry it", and that's it, how do you write a 600-word essay?
[laughs]: That's right! With repeated practice, you are now an omelette master. Think about what happened before you learned how to fry eggs, did you drop eggs, burned your hands, sprinkled oil, and even fried eggs that were finally fried could fly to the ground? This is called "look before and after", which is what happens before you learn how to fry eggs, and what happens after you learn how to fry eggs, such as the love egg that your brother likes and the soft-boiled egg that your mother loves to eat, and put it on a beautiful plate with a pattern......
[red-faced]: When I think about it, there's a lot to write about, but I don't want to write about the past things, and I've learned them all now.
[laughs]: So, in addition to "looking back and forth", we can also "look left and right", which is what is the process of an omelette. At first glance, it seems like what you just said, "Crack the egg in the pan and fry it." However, we still have to talk about what preparations need to be made.
[Red face]: Open the pan first and preheat it for a while, otherwise the eggs will flow everywhere and you won't be able to shape them.
[laughs]: A~ That's it! Open the pan first and preheat it for a while, then do you have to be sure how long it will take to preheat the eggs?
[red face]: I learned from my mother, after turning on the switch of the pan, after a while, I hung my hand on the pan, and my hand could feel very hot, and I could beat the egg.
[laughs]: This judgment is very important, and it has to be included in the composition. Also, where do you get eggs from, and how many eggs can you take at a time?
[red-faced]: Clever! Needless to say, our eggs are in the refrigerator of the Xiaoice box. I took two at a time, and I couldn't put it in my hand when I took too much, and I fell and broke it before. So I'll take it twice, just to fry four eggs for our family of four.
[laughs]: Haha, some people may not put the eggs in the refrigerator, and the grandparents put the eggs in the pantry~ Now the details are much richer, and there are more than 100 words at once.
[red-faced]: Well, really! Then there's the hard-boiled eggs. That's less than 600 words.
[laughs]: Don't worry, do you need oil in the omelette? When to put it? How do you crack eggs into the pan? How do eggs come out of their shells? You can't just throw it in with a shell.
[red-faced]: Haha, that can't be! When preheating the pan, you can put a little oil first, and then I take the egg with my right hand and gently knock it on the edge of the pan, not too heavy, the egg will break directly, and it can't be too light, otherwise it won't open. Knock a crack first, and then use two thumbs to pluck, and the egg liquid will flow into the pan. When you pick open the eggshell, you have to follow the pan underneath, and if you pick it casually, the egg will flow to the floor or countertop.
[laughs]: Okay! It's all valuable experience~~ Then say, after the egg is beaten into the cake pan, the yolk is still whole, and it still needs to be punctured like that? Do I need to put any seasoning? Need to be turned? These details have to be said.
[Red face]: My brother and I like to eat loose yellow, my mother likes to eat whole yellow, and my dad can do anything, so I will poke two or three. Gotta put salt. You have to turn it over, otherwise it won't be cooked.
[laughs]: Hmm~ Everyone's needs are different, so the frying method is different. When to put salt? Is it on one side, or both? How long can I eat it?
[Red face]: After the egg is beaten into the pan, you can sprinkle a little salt, one side can be fine, and both sides can be salty si person. I pinched a little salt with the three fingers of my right hand and rubbed it and sprinkled it in. Mom likes to eat soft-boiled eggs, so you can fry them and bring them out; My brother and my father and I both like to eat cooked food, preferably a little burnt and crunchy, and it will be fried for a longer time.
[laughs]: So how can you tell if it's charred and crispy?
[Red face]: It's just that the middle is solidified, and the edges start to turn yellow-brown, which is basically fine. Find a few plates and clip them out with tongs.
[laughs]: This detail is well added, we don't use our hands to hold it, we don't use chopsticks, but use clips.
[red-faced]: Then let's eat! Eat it hot, it's more delicious.
[laughs]: Haha, I think this omelette is delicious! Now 600 words is enough, when we write an essay, we can write a lot of details by "looking at the front and back" and then "looking left and right", and it will become a good essay with rich details.
[red-faced]: Hehe, I know Mom.
One more explanation: our brain workspace (similar to a commodity window) can only remember very limited details, generally up to 7, so when a child is doing a thing or experiencing a thing, he will only remember a very limited number of details, usually the core details or the details he is interested in, and he will automatically strengthen and amplify these two details, and the others will be ignored and placed in the subconscious area (similar to a warehouse) that he does not know. It takes someone to guide and stimulate more details from the subconscious and display them in the work area for him to use when writing essays.
That is to say, let's talk more about the child, the preparation before and after, what is next to the left and right, who is related to this person, this thing, and this thing, etc., talk about all the relevant details of this person and this thing, which can greatly open the child's mind and write a good composition with a delicate plot and rich details.
In addition to omelette, there are mopping the floor, drying clothes, tidying up desks and toys, washing pots and dishes, etc., from the trivial things of life can also be extended to repair and replace window screens, repair bicycles, repair motorcycles, maintain cars, set up tents, bake cakes and other crafts, and can also be further expanded to company establishment, fund management, organization and operation, project design, program planning, communication and coordination, team leadership, etc., each matter to complete perfectly, there are many, many details.
On the one hand, we have to teach children to do these housework chores, so that children can understand the secrets of craftsmanship or the operation of the organization, and it is best to practice it in person, we are good at teaching what we are good at, the bigger the child, the wider and deeper the topic involved, we must talk about all the requirements and details as much as possible when we teach; On the other hand, we also need to guide our children to "see again" afterwards and talk more about all aspects. Isn't the current college entrance examination narrative or essay all about giving children a piece of social material first, and then asking children to express their thoughts based on their own experiences?
All walks of life, a hundred flowers are blooming, maybe which flower can be used, and send the child to Tsinghua University and Peking University. Chat more, it will definitely be useful. Not once, come a few more times. A lot of knowledge comes from equal and loving parent-child chats in life.
Our child is very smart, as long as he listens carefully and thinks carefully, he will definitely be able to open his mind, and more details and materials will further gush out, and jump on the page in ways we didn't expect.
Finally, I attach this essay by Dabao, the level of the fourth grade, which was rated "excellent" by the teacher, and the screenshot is for your review and reference:
In the next article, let's talk about how to teach children to use words accurately, express meaning accurately, and make the article clear, interesting, and interesting.
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