I see how feminine Aoyama is—for example, to write a scene, we must grasp the characteristics

I see how feminine Aoyama is—for example, to write a scene, we must grasp the characteristics

Chinese painter Zhu Daoping ink paintings

【Technique clicking】

First, mobilize the sensory organs and write scenes at multiple levels

In order to better express the characteristics of the scene, we should fully mobilize the vision, hearing, touch, smell, and taste in order to express the shape, sound, color, texture, taste, dynamic and static situation, light and shade changes of the scene from multiple angles, and strive for a comprehensive three-dimensional depiction of the scenery characteristics. For example, Xiao Tie wrote in "The Yellow River at the Mouth of the Kettle": "When I really stood next to her, all the people were stunned. The earth sank down a layer, the sky was a foot high, the valley was shaped like a spout, the water was like turbid wine, pouring down, and the indescribable momentum filled the chest, and the heartbeat could jump out. The ears gradually became deaf, and they could only see the other party's opening, but they could not hear the sound. The eyes were also spent, and the eyes were all yellow swirls, as if they were rising from the river, and as if they were falling desperately. At the bottom of the river, a yellow mist like smoke rose, and the sky was filled with yellow particles with water, colliding on the face and emitting in the sky. "The author depicts the Yellow River from the perspective of vision, hearing, and touch, which arouses strong emotional resonance among readers.

Second, carefully select the image

Writing scenery is inseparable from the choice of imagery. For example, in the article "Autumn in the Ancient Capital", Yu Dafu paid great attention to the choice of scenery: for those representative attractions in the ancient capital, only understated, and the focus of the scene was on the small places and small scenes that readers tended to ignore, so in the "Morning Meditation Map", the author's depiction of some scenes seemed to be idle, but it reflected the cultural charm of the capital and received the effect of seeing the strange in peace.

Third, the scene blends, and I forget both things

All scenery is love language, and Xin's words and phrases "I see how feminine Qingshan is, and I should be like this when Qingshan sees me" is exactly this truth. For example, Su Shi wrote a sentence about the scenery under the moon in the "Night Tour of Chengtian Temple": "The garden is like the water in the air, the algae and the water are crossed, and the bamboo and cypress shadows are also covered." The author expands his imagination, with the help of metaphorical rhetorical techniques, the scene is allegorical, depicting to the reader a beautiful moon scene that is clear and clear, swaying and seemingly real, and tortuously expresses the author's lonely and relaxed complex state of mind.

Fourth, use a variety of expressions

The article can not use one expression alone, but must use other expressions to enrich or deepen the content of the article, so as to have a greater appeal to the reader. For example, at the end of Peggy Lee's "The Cottage": "My hut has a soul, and it gives me inspiration, strength and confidence." On the waves of life, the hut is like a boat for me to move forward. I'm going to raise my sails and sail toward the blue sea!" "The lyrical ending enhances the expressiveness of the article and leaves the reader with an endless aftertaste.

Fifth, the combination of virtual and real, broaden the imagination space of the article

The so-called "real" refers to the physical object, the real scene, etc., that is, the actual existence of things, while the "virtual" refers to the author's imagination or association with something, that is, the things that do not exist. The combination of virtual and real is to combine abstract narration with concrete description, or to combine the real life in front of us with memories and imagination. This technique is not only convenient to open up the writing ideas, but also to make the picture full of three-dimensional sense and artistry. For example, you should paint a painting with the content of "Deep Mountain Tibetan Ancient Temple", but it is required that no buildings appear in the picture. A clever painter skillfully conceived, using the combination of virtual and real techniques, ingeniously depicting the picture of an old monk drawing water at the foot of the mountain, which is in line with the theme of "Deep Mountain Tibetan Ancient Temple".

Example of a text

Hukou Waterfall Liang Heng Hukou is on the border between The two provinces of Shanxi and Shaanxi, and I have been there twice. The first time was the rainy season, and when it was about to leave, someone warned: "At this time, it is the most dangerous to see the mouth of the pot, do not go to the river beach, just in time for the rain to go upstream, a flood peak down, there is no time to go ashore." "Sure enough, the car was still halfway up the mountain when I heard the sound of the waves faintly thundering, the river valley was full of fog, and we had the courage to go down to the beach, and the river was like a pot of boiling water... I tried to look for the imaginary waterfall in the fog, but the water flooded the ditch bank, the fog covered with rocks, and I couldn't see anything except the water vapor and the deafening sound of the waves. So, after only a few glances, I hurried away. When I reached the shore and looked back at the white smoke, my heart was still beating... The second time I chose a dry season. The spring cold has just passed, the mountains are not yet green, and the valley floor looks unusually open. We calmly went down to the bottom of the ditch, when the Yellow River was like a huge stone bed, covered with a layer of soft fine sand, which was solid and soft. I went all the way to the center of the river, it turned out that there was a river in the middle of the river, it was a deep ditch that suddenly went down, the locals called it "Dragon Trough", and the trough head into the water was unfathomable, which was the "kettle mouth". I leaned on a large rock and looked upstream, and the dragon trough was topped by a wide river surface, forming a "D" character. The river gushed from the five-hundred-meter-wide river channel, and its momentum was like thousands of troops and horses, squeezing and bumping into each other, pushing and shoving, hugging forward and backward, crashing into the stone wall, and the yellow waves shattered into piles of white snow. The mountains are cold gray, the sky is lonely blue, and the universe seems to have only this water. When the river was running so freely and happily, suddenly a deep ditch more than forty meters wide appeared under their feet, and before they could think about it, they fell into it, more gushing, more crowded, more urgent. The bottom of the ditch flew one whirlpool after another, and the locals said that a black pig once fell into it, and when it floated up again, the hair on its body was pulled out of its body. I listened to it and gave a chill. The Yellow River here from wide and narrow, from high to low, only to see that the flat as a seat of water seems to be sucked by an invisible hole, suddenly folded into a bunch, rushing towards the dragon trough, first falling on the stone, turning over and then falling down, three falls, four falls, a river of water is hard to be crushed, shattered into points, broken into fog. A rainbow rose from the bottom of the ditch, straddling the dragon's trough, through the mist, and disappearing into the cyan background of the distant mountains. Of course, such a narrow mouth could not hold so much water for a while, so the torrent rushed to both sides, crashing down along the edge of the dragon's trough, thick and solemn like a roll of flying carpets falling from mid-air. No, it's like a roll of steel. Despite this, The hukou still could not fully collect this river and yellow wave, so there were some who took the road and took the road, took advantage of the gap, and turned back and roundabout... They spread out on the beach walls on both sides of the dragon trough, or the diamonds were slitted, gushing like a spring; or flowing through the stone slabs, babbling into a stream; or caught between the stones, mourning and swirling... And all this is hidden in the wet mist, shrouded in a rainbow of seven colors, like a symphony, a freehand painting. I suddenly fell into contemplation, how can this small pot mouth in front of me suddenly collect the forms of the sea, rivers, waterfalls, springs, and fogs, and be compatible with people's feelings of joy, anger, sorrow, resentment, and sorrow? Did the Creator want to condense a world in the mouth of this pot? Looking at the water, I looked closely at the stones under my feet. These steel-like stubborn objects were actually chiseled by the water, such as honeycombs, and in some places, they were spun out of a slippery pit, and the whole dragon trough was cut down by the water in unison, cutting out a deep ditch. People often compare tenderness to water, but the water that is so soft and harmonious can be so angry once it is oppressed. It turns out that there is only generosity and no weakness in this softness, and when it endures to a certain extent, it will compare its strength and fight hard. According to the "Travels of Xu Xia", the location of the hukou was still 1,500 meters downstream. You see, the soft water that has been going on day and night chops off the hard iron stone inch by inch. The Yellow River is broad and generous, soft and rigid; coercing and disobeying, pressing without bending; uneven is shouting, and resisting when it is strong; dying will be born, bravely moving forward, just like a person, after many tribulations, he has his own personality. When the Yellow River is forced by the mountains on both sides and the stones under the ground to suddenly go up and down, left and right, it also casts its own great character. This greatness is only seen by us at the moment of rushing through the mouth of the pot. (Selected from the "Liang Heng Volume of contemporary prose masters", slightly deleted)

【Comments】 The whole text is delicately written, mainly with the help of metaphors, anthropomorphisms and rhetorical techniques such as comparison, closely following the characteristics of things to write out the sound, shape, posture and greatness of the waterfall, and from the scene to the emotion, the Hukou Waterfall reflects the majestic beauty of the Yellow River and the spirit of people who are not bent and brave, and the main theme of the article is sublimated in the water.

Examples of assignments

Pinnacle Ridge Liu Jia, The Fourth Middle School of Laiwu City, Shandong Province On Hainan Island, I climbed the high Pinnacles. Look at the vast forest sea, reckless and wild, layered on top of each other, gushing with endless green waves, spreading out in front of my eyes, let me feel the rough beauty and wild beauty. And when I entered the forest, I felt the mysterious beauty of the vines and roses, the ferns, the forest walls as wide as the curtains, the caves like the abyss, and the airtight forest trunks. Shelley once said it best: "All things, because of the laws of nature, must merge into one spirit." "I saw from the forest the momentum of nature's divine pen, its iron and silver hooks strong and powerful, without this eternal creative spirit, all things could not exist. You see, here, every tree looks tall and tall, they have no leisure, no signs of hesitation, just a vigorous upward growth, desperately toward the clear sky, toward the sun. In fact, in the natural world of survival of the fittest and survival of the fittest, it is not easy for them to thrive. They have had a power contest and struggle with each other, such as Zhen Nan holding a palm, and the air root of the alpine banyan wrapped around another big tree... However, they finally grew up with each other and appeared to be full of life. As a result, I heard the heartbeat from the depths of the mountains and forests from these living species, and saw the most beautiful and artistic treasures. Tropical virgin forests have the purest and most simple beauty. It is unpretentious, unadorned, and presents itself with a simple, authentic face. It is rich in content and species, and the tree fern and silver fir, known as "living fossils", are still thriving. As I walked deeper into the forest, I only felt that the green color was getting heavier and heavier, the smell of the earth fragrance was getting stronger and stronger, and the wild fun everywhere was becoming more and more charming. I can hear the love of the mountain elves for the forest from the crisp sound of birds, such as thrushes, white egrets and raw chickens, and from the intricate hoof prints, I can see the attachment of the jungle heroes such as deer, wild camels, and roe deer to their homeland. When I crossed the weeping stream and reached the center of the forest, I was greeted by another strange scene: at the top of the ten thousand trees, the hanging orchid, the broken bone patch and the bird's nest fern intertwined to form a dense green net, and the bright flowers of green, red, white and purple were dotted on this green net, forming a magical and magnificent hanging garden. yes! Here the mountains are green, the trees are lush, the flowers are colorful, and the beauty is breathtaking. Wandering in this green treasure house, I strongly felt a spirit of courage to fight and indomitable spirit. Lo and behold, all trees have the belief of growing timber and have been persistently pursuing light and heat. There is also the pioneer tree species that flies in the wind, takes root on the ground, and with its own strength can be naturally renewed and grown into a forest on the bare or unforested land... Although I ran through the forest day and day, I did not tire, because the beautiful and mysterious Pinnacle Ridge brought me the influence of beauty, the encouragement of hope and the thinking about vitality.

【Comments】This article is written in the order of observation from the outside to the inside, layer by layer. In order to make the scene vivid and concrete, the author uses a variety of rhetorical techniques, the comprehensive use of narrative, discussion, lyricism and other expression methods, so that the emotion and the scene are closely blended together, of which the lyrical and argumentative sentences deepen the center of the article. And the article is also worth learning from in terms of word construction, and the combination of long sentences and short sentences makes the language vivid and lively.

Original: Shandong Chen Faqiang

Excerpt from the Composition Guide