The old cow broke the car and couldn't straighten the mountain song of that year
A whip early in the morning
Falling, sighing sunset all the way
【Sea Breeze Comment】This poem, the picture is exquisite, the sense of reality is strong. Bitterness, embodied in pleasure; The new feeling poetry technique is particularly prominent, the context is new, and the agility runs through the whole poem. The last sentence soars strongly; The hard life is dynamic and emotional, showing the humanistic feelings of that era. The story of time, I was moved, praise!
The phrase "a whip early in the morning" is so strong that it seems to challenge your traditional "taste buds". Is it acceptable to other platforms? Because of subjective emotions, the imagination can be completely liberated; Talent is imaginative. This is the difference between the new sensation and the old age spots. In addition, the whimsy: the same person, the same first prize, the quality of the two may wish to be compared.
That piece of reeds swayed
Challenge/Liaoning
Bai Yangdian, since the sunset drove away the sound of gunfire
- The days are no longer tight
The boat is leisurely! A roar broke Through March
【Interpretation of the sea and the sky】
The small poem has a high intention, the entry point is novel, the time and space span is large, the switching between the two pictures is natural and smooth, there are both thick lines outlined and detailed descriptions, the language defamiliarization implantation is the best, and the verb use enhances the flexibility and readability of the poem.
BaiYangdian, the biggest reed swing, well-known at home and abroad, after the sunset drove away the sound of gunfire, alluding to the smoke of the Beacon War, paving the way for the introduction of the next sentence, the days are no longer tight, indicating that the people there are no longer suffering from the war as before, opening a new chapter The empty line is appropriate, leaving the reader with a chance to breathe, and it is also a sentence conversion.
The second picture is very charming, and the boat is leisurely! A roar to break through March, the last sentence to enhance powerfully, simple words but vivid and lively, pointing out the happy life of people in Baiyangdian today, boat (visual), shouting (hearing), puncturing (touch), synaesthesia techniques and jumping can be seen, the word March is a fiction, March is a peach blossom, representing love, which jumps out of the poem to write a story, showing the happy love of men and women in Baiyangdian today, extending the theme, the contrast between the old and the new, highlighting the idea.
The use of small poem verbs can be described as wonderful, "drive away, eat tight, break" interspersed tightly, the meaning is profound, and the vitality of the context is increased.
Biography:
Challenge Now living in Liaoning Province, a woman who likes words, has works scattered on various online platforms and paper journals, poetry: poetry should keep pace with the times, reflecting beauty and values.