Su Zi reviews
Editor's note: Everyone is amazing in the youth of struggle; inside and outside the examination room, we are all answerers. For the fifth consecutive year, The Paper's Commentary has invited commentators and college students to write college entrance examination essays together, cheering and encouraging tens of millions of candidates. This year, we continue to invite Su Zi, a senior Chinese teacher at a demonstration high school in Shanghai, to "review and score" these essays from the professional perspective of chinese teachers.
1. Time brings, death can not take away (Shanghai volume)
Author: Li Xie
After the precipitation of time, can it bring value to things?
Some people say, yes. "The jade test must be burned for three days, and the identification of materials must be waited for seven years. Without the test of time, how can people know the loyalty and hard work of Zhou Gong, and how can they know Han Xin's ambition and talent? Under the wash of the river of time, people, things, and things, like stones, have been polished off the edges and corners of the fake decorations, washed away the mediocre skin, and exposed the hard and indelible essence.
In the hundred families of the sons of the pre-Qin Dynasty, the doctrines and scholars who were prouder than Confucius and Confucianism for a time and famous among the princes were not rare, and only Confucianism withstood the test of time and became the axis of Chinese civilization. In the face of the question of "what is the use of this thing", faraday, a British scientist who discovered the phenomenon of electromagnetic induction, replied: "What is the use of newborn babies?" "When the steam train was first invented, people ridiculed it as fast as a horse-drawn carriage...
Time, only time, can fairly allow babies to grow, so that the advanced, powerful, and just ones all occupy their rightful place in history.
It is also said that in the example you gave, you are all right, but not everything needs to be settled over time to reveal its value. The so-called cone is placed in the sac, and the sharp edge is exposed. There are many things that, when they appear in front of the world, immediately shine brightly. The great ancient Greek philosopher Aristotle, when he was studying, was affirmed by his mentor Plato, who thought that this was a foal that would surely lead thousands of miles.
When the "May Fourth Movement" first began, some scholars believed that it would be a great event that would change history. When the computer was first invented, the computing performance was not as good as a calculator today, and science fiction writers have conceived of a future in which computers will rule the world... The value of things needs to stand the test of time, but it does not mean that all things need time to give their value.
There are also third parties who say that what you two said is still somewhat lacking. The value of things actually rises and falls in the waves of time. Even if we can't do without computers today, don't we have scientists' predictions that if artificial intelligence is overdeveloped, it will hinder human beings themselves?
Therefore, time does not necessarily precipitate value, it is just a reversal, allowing us to see the different aspects of people, things, things and different effects of changes and development...
So, who of these three is right? Perhaps, all right, and not enough. "Spring flowers bloom, autumn wind, and winter sunshine", time brings not only flowers, but also wind and frost, rain and snow. We are all in a certain fragment of the torrent of time, enjoying the development of history, the results of time precipitation, and bearing all kinds of troubles and confusion accumulated by history.
There is a Persian proverb: "When time comes, death cannot take away." "Only by revering history, revering time, and starting carefully and ending well, can time precipitate more value and leave a better future for history."
Comments: Positive and negative, the first two parts are more exciting, the last two paragraphs are slightly thin, the relationship between time, the value of things, and people's cognition can be more clear. 【Class 1 under 63 points Shanghai volume 70 points】
2, life has to gain and lose, peach blossoms still smile spring breeze (Zhejiang volume)
Author: Merdestown
From ancient times to the present, gain and loss, giving and gaining, are people's spiritual bondage, everyone's life, it seems to be trapped in the square inch of gain and loss, it is difficult to extricate themselves. The joy of getting, the sadness of losing, the encouragement when you get, the blow when you lose, have also become the norm of everyone's life, most people are wandering in the cycle of gain and loss, and they have never been able to get out of the real dilemma of gain and loss.
To say a very vivid analogy: most people's lives, are being "gain and loss" as a toy, few people have the ability to play with "gain and loss" as a toy.
People who are toyed with by "gain and loss" will regard "gain and loss" as the end point, and will also regard "gain and loss" as the starting point, and even be praised by "gain and loss" but forget their original hearts, or blow to the ground and lose hope. Such a person, who attaches too much importance to and magnifies "gain and loss", is naturally easy to be bound by "gain and loss". In this way, in essence, the life of the relevant individual is not dominated by itself, but is dominated by "gain and loss", and pushed to become the so-called "tool man".
Turning to the big book of history, such people abound.
For example, after the victory over the Yue Kingdom, Fluttershy was overwhelmed, and after being defeated by the Yue Kingdom, Wu Wang Fuchai, who was ashamed to draw his sword and kill himself, regarded "gain" as the starting point of luxury, and "lost" as the end of his life. There is also Zhuge Liang, who died before he could succeed, and who made the hero cry for a long time, and the Chongzhen Emperor, who hanged himself in the coal mountain, in the face of "gain and loss", all became losers, but did not become the masters of "gain and loss".
In modern society, those "exquisite egoists" are essentially slaves to "gain and loss".
So, how to play or control the "gains and losses"? In this regard, in fact, the ancients also had some clever annotations. Sai Weng lost his horse, knowing that it was not a blessing; blessings and misfortunes depended on, misfortunes and blessings arrived; mountains and rivers were doubtful and there was no way, willows and flowers were bright and another village, etc., all of which were manifestations of the ancients playing or controlling "gains and losses". On the surface, it is said that there are no absolute good things and bad things in this world, bad things and good things, which are both interdependent and can be transformed into each other, but in fact, what they emphasize is still the mentality of people, and they must be positive.
However, the ancients' cognition of controlling "gain and loss" actually only saw one side, that is, the mentality of facing gain and loss was better, but what they did not see was that the pursuit of dealing with gains and losses should be firm, and the related pursuits were not shifted by "gains and losses".
We must realize that people who can really play with "gains and losses" will only regard "gains and losses" as a process, as an experience, an experience, and a "booster" in growth. In their lives, no matter how they gain or lose, they cannot change their firm beliefs and life pursuits, they cannot change their sincere ideals, and they cannot stop the realization of their individual values and even social values.
And such people, there is no shortage of typical cases. For example, the older generation of revolutionary martyrs who created a new China, Yuan Longping, who had dreamed of cooling down under the grass and the dream of covering the world with hybrid rice, Zhong Nanshan, who went out of the mountains at the age of 84 to go to the frontline epidemic area, and the thousands of "loveliest people" who contributed to the fight against the epidemic. In their eyes, gains and losses are not important, their own pursuit is important, their own value and ideals are important.
Life has gains and losses, and peach blossoms still smile in the spring breeze. What has changed is "gain and loss", but the positive attitude of life is still the same, and the firm pursuit of values and ideals adheres to the "still". Regardless of the result, enjoy the process, enjoy the value created in the process, and bring hope.
This is what everyone should look like when facing "gain and loss".
Comments: Buckle the attitude of "gain and loss", divide and describe, the level is clear, the title image. Unfortunately, the examples given are somewhat old-fashioned. 【54 points under the first category Zhejiang volume 60 points】
3. On the Time of Life (Beijing Volume, Title 1)
Author: Chen Yuqian
Southern Dynasty Liang, it is a turbulent and precarious era, the young Liu Xun borrowed to live in the Dinglin Temple to read, suddenly had a feeling, wrote down the famous sentence "Poor is good at writing, da is to serve the time to perform". This is also a portrayal of his life, Da Ze and the party, poor is "Wenxin Carved Dragon", flowing through the ages, Biao Bing's history.
Liu Xun is one of the portrayals of people in the big era, the era is a wave, it is difficult to be. Some people are pushed away and can only go with the flow; some people know the current affairs as Junjie, seek change and seek common ground, called the choice of the moment; and some people seek the overall situation, cut into the times, wave to curb the flying boat, and seek benevolence.
Infected with the world, depending on the timing, is often the first choice of people who keep to themselves, but at this time, the fate of life is often not in the hands, once the luck is not good, only to go back to shame and regret for a lifetime.
Puyi was the last emperor of the late Qing Dynasty, but he did not seem to have been his own master in his life, was forced to abdicate in the Xinhai Revolution, accepted the support of zhang xun and restored, and later even became a puppet Manchu emperor under Japanese control for several years. A life of wandering, I had to lament in prison: "Freedom is precious, and the price of face is higher." If it is a matter of life, both can be thrown away. ”
The autumn wind has not moved the cicadas for the first time, and some people can perceive the changes of the times, take the initiative to attack, and be conscientious and self-reliant. After experiencing the peril of the country and many humiliations, the readers of the late Qing Dynasty wrote many works of repentance and respect for the sword: Zhou Shiyun "Seeking revenge in the four seas with the sword of the hero, it is difficult to regret the Confucian crown for more than a hundred years"; Liu Yazi sighed "Endure to see the motherland degenerate into a non-species, bitterly hate the Confucian crown for this wrong body"; Chen Zhiyi "would rather cherish the hair cone and throw it, so as to carry the sword to the three sides"... Later, the poetry society "Nanshe", jointly organized by these patriotic poets, inspired the energy of the nation and became the spark of revolution.
More far-reaching thinkers can see the changes of the times, walk with the times, and fight hard. Recently, the drama "The Age of Awakening" has spread all over the Internet, and the stories of the ancestors who have gone forward and followed and the blue wisps of the road have touched countless audiences. The thoughts of Chen Duxiu, Li Dazhao, Mao Zedong and others were golden and jade, and in the dark years, they stirred up deafness and opened up the wisdom of the people, drove a red boat from Shikumen, asked no questions about the west and east, all the way to the north, docked in Xibaipo, opened a new era, and truly pushed the times forward with their own strength. I really have to praise it: "The popularity of Si is still majestic, and the river has flowed from ancient times." ”
Hegel once said: "When dusk comes in the evening, Minerva's owl will take off". This is to describe that at the end of an era and the beginning of a new era, the vigilant thinker can always meet the tide and hit the water, and carve his mark in the era.
Do not take the initiative, do not refuse, passively face the times, sometimes ushered in is not the Yan Ruyu that the heart desires, but the old fist with heavy life. Thinking about society, seeing through the times, running ahead, and running hard are all timely. To borrow an Internet buzzword: "Isn't it still called young people?" ”
Give me up who I am.
Comments: Buckle the inscription, quote the scriptures, and oppose the photo. The expression of the word "on" is slightly lacking. 【44 points on the second category Beijing volume 50 points】
4. The weak should be self-reliant, and the strong should be responsible (National New College Entrance Examination I. Volume I)
Author: West Slope
"Those born strong do not have to be complacent, and those who are born weak do not have to be sad about themselves." I was born weak, or the heavens tempted me to be strong, unknowable. "This truth doesn't just apply to sports.
From society to family, every group has strong and weak. How to arrange the relationship between the two determines the future of a group.
The worst-case scenario is that the strong are complacent and do what they can do to insult and harm the weak; the weak are united in order to overthrow the strong and eliminate differences. The strong say "you are weak and you are reasonable", the weak say "you are strong, you cheat", and both sides go to extremes, dividing the group into two.
The strong are unreasonable to the culmination of social Darwinism. The weak are unreasonable to the extreme, and they are egalitarian. History has long shown that these are all unworkable roads.
The strong should realize that the day is in the middle of the day, and the one who is too rigid is easy to fold. Under the power of time, nothing is immortal. There is an allusion related to Lao Tzu that a person's teeth are out, but the tongue is still intact. "Isn't the existence of the tongue of the husband a servant of his tongue a servant of his tongue?" Isn't the death of the tooth also known as its gangye? ”
The weak must realize that for a society to move forward, it is inseparable from the leader and the vanguard. Fairness and equality are two concepts. What we should pursue is equality of opportunity and unity of starting line, rather than equality of process and equality of results. No matter how the initial conditions are adjusted, there will always be someone higher, faster and stronger, which is also a natural law.
The advantage of the strong is in strength, and the advantage of the weak is in quantity. The advantage of the strong is in the intellect, and the advantage of the weak is in the emotion. When the two sides merge, they win both, and when they fight, they lose twice. The strong disregard the rights of the weak, efficiency trumps fairness, and efficiency is difficult to guarantee in the long run. The weak ignore the contribution of the strong, everyone dares not come forward, and the overall vitality is greatly damaged.
Importantly, strengths and weaknesses will transform into each other, and the transformation process is often lightning fast. The strong one today may be the weak one yesterday. Today's weak may also become tomorrow's strong. We want others to treat us like that, first of all.
Zi Gong Yue: "Poor and unscrupulous, rich and arrogant, how can it be?" Zi Yue: "But also." Those who are not poor and happy, rich and courteous. Confucius meant that the weak should be self-reliant, and the strong should take responsibility.
The way of poverty and happiness, the way of self-improvement also. Do not feel sorry for yourself because you are in a weak position, but insist on understanding the world and mastering the law, which is possible to change from weak to strong.
Rich and courteous, courtesy, responsibility is also. People who like to show off are not really rich. Discrimination against the weak is not really strong. What they want to fill is the emptiness of the heart. The improvement of a society must start with the strong taking the initiative to take responsibility.
Both the strong and the weak are members of the community. All our wisdom and abilities come from generation to generation, and they must be passed on endlessly to future generations. This is the common honor and responsibility of all people.
Comments: Captured the keyword "strong and weak". First divide the strong and the weak, and then talk about the transformation of strength and weakness (here the weight is slightly heavier), the two are compared, and the language is more dual. 【57 points in the first category of the National New College Entrance Examination I. Full score of 60 points】
5. Every anniversary is worthy of respect (Tianjin volume)
Author: Han Haoyue
I'm a person who can't remember the anniversary. Because of the migration of the age and household registration, I couldn't even figure out what day my birthday was, and I really wanted to get "authoritative information", so I asked my mother, who always remembered the child's birthday, because it was her "Good Friday".
I'm also a person who doesn't care much about the sense of ceremony. For example, during the holiday season, to make a few testimonials at the dinner table, make a wish on the birthday candle, and so on, always make me fidget, and quickly perfunctory things. But I like to work silently, before a major festival arrives, tow the ground clean, everything is organized, busy, with a cup of tea and looking out the window for a while, I feel inexplicably happy.
The ideal anniversary in my mind is always quiet, too noisy, as if it has lost a solemnity and depth.
I have no special hope for big or small anniversaries. If time is a one-way street, the anniversary is a signpost, if the time is a river, the anniversary is a tree on the shore... But both roads and rivers stretch forward, and we are not allowed to stay or indulge in a certain day.
Only by constantly being repeated and emphasized, a day of remembrance, can leave a deep imprint on a person's life and thoughts. Many anniversaries actually hide many contradictions and struggles in people's hearts. The anniversary itself is worn down and consumed by time and memory. Some anniversaries, in this way, become small black spots in the rearview mirror, and the distant places that gradually pass away in the fog.
Some anniversaries are bright, plated with the gold of the sun, which is the result of the constant wiping of countless hands, and it has an inspiring power; some are lush, and even if little attention is paid to, they will grow savagely in the desert and refuse to wither; some are gray, with a somewhat sad "matte" that is ignored during the day and remembered late at night...
The anniversary projects the emotions of too many people, it becomes in a sense a "container", a "common divisor" of group conventions, it can be large or small, but each deserves respect.
365 days a year, it is said that there are more than 400 anniversaries, so some people say that "the anniversary day without holidays is not a real festival", but more than 400 anniversaries, most of which are written in the public calendar, those that belong to individual anniversaries, how to calculate, measure, evaluate?
When celebrating a good public anniversary, as an individual, we should also pay attention to the anniversary that belongs to the individual, and the individual emotion is also a rich "universe", and it is also necessary to mark the sea of stars here.
I'm a person who can't remember the anniversary. I have forgotten many anniversaries, but I do have some anniversaries engraved in my heart. It was the fireworks that belonged to me alone, the tsunami earthquake... If you happen to have a similar experience, those days are our common anniversaries.
Comments: The prose, closely related to the anniversary of the unfolding, the beginning of the pen is slightly plain, and the later text gradually enters a better situation. Two sections of the anniversary of the color and container, praise. 【57 points in the first category Tianjin volume out of 60 points】
6. Do not forget the "original heart" in order to be in the middle of the "bullseye" (national volume B)
Author: Lü Jingwat
There is a line in the movie "Galaxy Tuition Class": Life is like archery, and dreams are like targets. However, the world is vast and the environment is complex, so how easy is it to talk about the bullseye? In this process, it is necessary to have a precise and clear goal, an indomitable momentum, and a concentration that is not moved by external objects, but the most fundamental thing is a "positive" word - the target must be inserted correctly, and the arrow must fly straight.
Arrows are like this, and so are people. Some time ago, Academician Yuan Longping passed away, we deeply miss him, thank him for his life's work to make us eat a full stomach; but also pay tribute to his spirit, simple, pure, with a lifetime to achieve a commitment, practice a mission. His life is a life of dedication to the country and service to the people, he is worthy of the title of "top traffic", he is the best example for teenagers!
Grandpa Yuan Longping did not really leave, he handed over the baton of the times to the hands of our generation. We who were once guarded by the world have come to stand up and guard the world. Born in the prosperous world, shouldering heavy responsibilities, the bullseye of our youth and the ideal bullseye are the "concentric circles" jointly painted by individuals, countries and times. No matter how far away you are from the bullseye, never forget to anchor the direction of your journey.
Perhaps, your ideal is to be an angel dressed in white. Then please don't forget that when the epidemic is widespread and the fog locks the river city, who is fearless and retrograde, racing against time, fighting against the virus, and fighting against death. The stranglehold under the mask is their most beautiful mark, and the resolute eyes under the goggles are like the sun that dispels the night. There are no heroes who fall from the sky, only mortals who stand up, and it is they who tell us with the benevolence of healers, "Except for the triple snow of the king's body, who in the world is clothed in white?" ”
Perhaps, your dream is to be a teacher. Then please don't forget that Zhang Guimei, the "principal mother" of the Dashan girls, sent a total of 1804 girls to the university on the side of Huaping County, Yunnan Province, and lit up their dreams in life. In the "human miracle" of poverty alleviation, she may only be a flame, but she has a powerful burning force.
Perhaps, your ideal is to be a soldier. Then please don't forget the "border eagle" on the Karakoram Mountains, high cold, lack of oxygen, strong winds, dangerous terrain... They use their flesh and blood to transform into the Great Wall that guards the motherland's territory, only because behind them are the lights of thousands of homes, the peace and security of the country, "clear love, only for China."
Perhaps, you and I are both inconspicuous waves, but what note is missing from the symphony of the times? Do your job well, ordinary breeds greatness, everyone is their own hero, and everyone's dream will resonate with the Same Frequency as the Chinese Dream!
"Only when you have faith in your heart can you go far." This "belief" is the value concept and morality we have always adhered to. "Open the bow and don't look back", please fly towards the bullseye of youth, and at that time, the bullseye will bloom out of the flower of youth!
Comments: The introduction is vivid at the beginning, and the following text stands still, with more examples and fewer reasoning. 【48 points in the second category, National B volume, 60 points】
7. How many ways can "people" be written? (National New College Entrance Examination Volume II)
Author: Yi Zhi
This cartoon is actually a standard way of writing the word "person" in italics. The description of the stroke action has a very obvious meaning.
For example, to start the pen, it is necessary to "start the pen against the front, hide it without revealing it", that is, people must hold on to the profit and keep the false, guard against arrogance and impetuosity; when they go to the middle, they must "use the pen in the center and be impartial"; that is, they must be frank and frank, just and upright; and the pen should be "stagnant and roundabout, slowly out of the head", that is, they must work for a long time and persevere. In this way, a "person" word is written well, and a person is also done well.
But is that how the word "people" is written?
From the point of view of calligraphy, of course not. Wang Xizhi's "ren" is written very flowing and flexible; Chu Suiliang's "ren" character is graceful and charming; Mi Fu's "ren" character is even more imaginative, and the last stroke is written like both a pinch and a dot, known as "eight sides out of the front"...
Just as Kong Yiji said that there are several ways to write the word "fennel", if the style is also a kind of writing, the word "ren" is also very difficult. Ou, Yan, Liu, Zhao, Su, Huang, Mi, Cai, Nan Dongbei, all different.
There are so many words for "people", so is it the same for people?
If you turn to "The New Language of the World", you can see that in fact, personality also has many meta-aspects. Ruan Is informal, Ji Kang is dashing and uninhibited, Wang Dao is meticulous and thoughtful, Xie An is clear and lofty, wang Shu is impatient and irritable... If we say that these historical figures have all been vividly transformed into a "person" word, presumably they also have their own advantages and disadvantages, and they are by no means the same.
So, can this standard letter "person" be said to be meaningless? After all, people have many faces, how can there be only one "way to write"?
I'm afraid not. The word "正" indicates the basic meaning of the calligraphy, and after the birth of the calligraphy, it is basically recognized as the beginning of calligraphy.
Therefore, Wang Xizhi, Chu Suiliang, Mi Fu, Zhao Mengfu, Dong Qichang, no matter who they are, no matter what kind of style they conjure up in the end, ethereal and depressed, they must have scribbled and worked neatly, and written down this "person" who "hides without revealing", "is impartial", and "slowly emerges". These neat and rigorous words are the starting point of the later stylistic mutation.
The same is true of being human. No matter what kind of character it becomes in the end, no matter how many thousands of people, fundamentally speaking, those principles of being human are actually the same, integrity, kindness, bravery, compassion... External image characteristics and personality characteristics can be ever-changing and even strange, but the essence of those people is not much different.
From Ruan To Wang Shu, you can be regarded as a positive figure in history. They are recorded in the classics, and from the appearance of them, they are by no means "all the way people". But how different is it to open these "outsides" and look deep inside? Ruan Jufang's birthday, Xie An's lofty vision, is not in essence a kind of reflection on the essential meaning of human beings and the spiritual world?
This is especially true in modern society. We live in China, a planet of 6 billion people and a population of 1.4 billion, and rich diversity is the background. The differences between people are certainly huge, and different tastes, preferences, and concepts will constitute a colorful genealogy.
From today's Internet point of view, because of some cognitive differences, there can always be a huge collision of views. I hope that everyone can see this cartoon, each of us is different, but there are only a few qualities that people should have. Our analysis of things and judgment of others should in fact maintain a concern for the background and tolerance for differences.
Today, we need to emphasize this truth even more: we are very different, because we are people who live in different corners; we are not so different, and the core quality of human beings is the existence that spans time and space.
Comments: From writing to being a person, first go along and then reverse and then merge, grasp the theme, unfold layer by layer, for example, also take calligraphy as evidence, cut the topic. Paragraphs are slightly fragmented, and synonymous paragraphs can be merged. 【Category 55 National New College Entrance Examination Volume II" with a full score of 60 points】
8. This is the appearance of maturity (Beijing volume, Title 2)
Author: Ding Yongxun
In 1999, I took the college entrance examination. During the intense sprint, I participated in the first patriotic event of my life.
In May of that year, THE US-led NATO bombed the Chinese embassy in the Federal Republic of Yugoslavia, and three Chinese journalists were martyred. When we learned of this news from the news, we in the small county town of the eighth line were extremely angry. Pushing aside the hill-like review material in front of us, rubbing his red eyes, he began to discuss how to express our grief and indignation.
We ripped the cleanest white sheet from the dormitory, wrote the four big words "Disband NATO" with a brush, and four people held it in front of us, lined up and rushed out of the campus and walked onto the main road of the county town.
At that time, the small county did not have KFC and McDonald's, and there were no apple and Cadillac stores. The angry young man had nowhere to vent, lit a bulletin board with a poster of "Titanic" in front of the county cinema, and on the way back, he pulled down the guardrail in the middle of the road in front of the school.
The event was eventually stopped by the school's director of instruction. He led a few security guards to stop us from the street and rush to the open-air playground to take a mock exam. Looking at the indignant crowd, the director of education said to the leading ones, "Just a few of you, or disband NATO?" Let's think about how to get into college. ”
This attitude makes us very angry, "As a teacher, how can you be so unpatriotic and so contemptuous of our patriotic feelings?" "Maybe in his eyes, there are only college entrance examination results."
Looking back now, that sentiment had a background at the time. At that time, a trend of containing China in the world was spreading, and it also triggered some complex national feelings. For example, the most popular book of that year was "China Can Say No", and the biggest international event was the obstruction of the Olympic bid and the Taiwan Strait crisis.
That year, I was admitted to Peking University, which had just celebrated my 100th birthday. In the four years of university, in addition to completing the prescribed study tasks, I was eager to read, listen to different lectures, visit many historical sites, and discuss and identify difficulties with various people, discussing specific academic issues and caring about the future of the country and the nation.
After all, in such a turbulent era, such a school known for its diversity of ideas. Lu Xun said that there is no university in the world, like Peking University, that is so closely related to the fate of the country and the nation.
During college, there is still a moment that is still unforgettable, that is, the successful olympic bid in the sophomore year. It was summer vacation, and a few of our classmates were on the way to the zhejiang coastal social research, and in the small hotel room where the three of us lived together, we surrounded a small TV and witnessed the moment when the results were revealed.
Because of the great regret of losing the bid for the 2000 Olympic Games by two votes, the ecstasy after the success was so full of joy. The next day, we were in a small coastal town in Zhejiang And saw a celebratory picture full of streets.
Later, I personally participated in Olympic volunteer service and also participated in the news coverage of the 2008 Beijing Olympic Games. To this day, I still think of those unforgettable moments from time to time.
After misunderstanding, frustration, and hurt, we can still insist on being open, enterprising, and inclusive, and actively embrace this imperfect world. I think that's what maturity looks like. This is true for one person, and it is true for a country.
Comments: The narrative has a detailed strategy and a sense of truth, but how the mature appearance is, in several things, is not very well represented. 【37 points on the third category Beijing volume 50 points】
9, many human miracles, are from the can be done to promising (national volume A)
Author: Zeng Ying
I like the TV series "The Most Beautiful Youth", which tells the story of a group of young people who, with their youth and blood, have turned Saihanba, the source of yellow sand, into millions of acres of forest in a few decades. It's moving because it's real.
In the TV series, the most touching plot is the technician in charge of seedlings, a person breeding on a cold desert, for several years without harvest, almost collapsed. But he had always believed firmly in his heart that the seeds could be nurtured, because the only remaining century-old tree standing in the cold wind gave him confidence that it was once a forest. It was with this belief that he and his companions eventually did something "promising"—to completely erase a mighty desert from the map.
If "doing" is the result, then "can be" is confidence, and "can't do" may be a catalyst for reverse incentives. Because they believe that "can be", they become "promising" and overcome "cannot be done". All perfection begins with completion.
Snails become racing champions, and little people become heroes, not just Hollywood's patent. In our culture, the reclamation of the sea, the fool who digs the mountain, the father who chases the sun and the houyi who shoots the sun, have all been idols in our minds. They do not exist only in our bedtime stories, but are integrated into the blood of an entire nation. This kind of tenacity is a touching background color in our Chinese civilization.
Under the infiltration and encouragement of such a culture, our ancestors turned too many impossibilities into miracles on earth and created a splendid civilization. No matter how seemingly impossible things are, even if the strength and weakness are so disparities, the road ahead is so slim, I don't want anything else, "just do it."
No matter how huge the project, it is built brick by brick; no matter how complicated the picture, it is drawn in one stroke; no matter how huge the blueprint, it is built bit by bit; no matter how great the journey, it is all step by step.
This year marks the 100th anniversary of the founding of the Communist Party of China. If we travel back a hundred years ago, how many people dare to believe that in Shanghai, where the air is cold, on the windy and rainy South Lake, on the road of struggle full of dangers, in the face of such a powerful and fierce encirclement and suppression force, how big a dozen young people in thin clothes will do?
But history has given a clear answer – on the road to success, never underestimate the power of faith. Because of this belief, many human miracles have quietly occurred.
Comments: The introduction part is slightly longer, the topic is slow; the middle section is brilliant, regardless of language or exposition; the end paraphrases "belief", and it is better to point "can" and "have a future". 【Category II 53 National Volume A full score of 60 points】
10. Anniversary: Stay, Think and Remember (Tianjin Volume)
Author: Hua Luyue
In the fast-paced modern life, people are accustomed to constantly catching up, and it seems that slowing down has become a reverse path, not to mention the occasional pause. Information is constantly changing, busyness has become the norm, and we who are carried forward by the flow of people have forgotten to stay and forget to think. Anniversary gives us the opportunity to reflect and sum up, let us give ourselves a legitimate reason in this impetuous life, pause for a while, focus on thinking, and remember history.
In the Analects, Zeng Zi Youyun, "My Three Provinces and My Body", we are surprised and moved by the self-disciplined character of the ancient sages. It is true that self-reflection and thinking should have become the norm, but for various objective and subjective reasons, most people in real life cannot achieve this. Anniversaries can help us pause for a moment, temporarily break away from the one-way street running in a fixed direction, turn our attention to the past, look back at the road ahead, and re-examine the past, present and future through the eyes of previous people.
Thinking presupposes the necessary leisure, and anniversaries give us time to focus on thinking. Birthdays, New Year's Eves, holidays, etc., are our favorite anniversaries, in which people sort out and think about their performance over a period of time, and then write down the results of their thoughts in a diary or circle of friends. Thus, these words and anniversaries are preserved as evidence of reflection for us to compare and reflect on the next anniversary, and we continue to grow in this ritual.
Forgetfulness is a common human being, and anniversaries help us fight memory in a fixed way. According to the German scholar Asman's theory of cultural memory, anniversaries, as a way of cultural memory representation, use rituals to evoke former historical memories, such as important people and objects, to prevent memories from being forgotten or marginalized by society. It is these marked days that regularly remind us not to forget the things that should not be forgotten. Germany's Memorial Day for the Victims of Nazism, The Day of Remembrance of the End of the European Theater of World War II, National Day of Remembrance for the Victims of the Nanjing Massacre in China... Each date carries important memories to play a role in historical reflection.
Remember to pass on. This year marks the 100th anniversary of the founding of the Communist Party of China, and it is this special anniversary that reminds us not to forget the enthusiastic young people on the red boats of Shikumen and Jiaxing in Shanghai 100 years ago, not to forget the heroes and martyrs who sacrificed their lives for the truth in the revolutionary years, and not to forget the hard-won years of peace. These precious legacies of memory have been transformed into indelible spiritual strength, admonishing us not to forget our original intentions and fulfill our mission; into red genes passed down from generation to generation, condensing the sons and daughters of China together and enriching the historical memory of the Chinese nation; and turning them into a driving force for us to forge ahead and provide inexhaustible strength for us to open up a new journey.
Anniversaries are like knots on the rope of time, pearls that cannot be ignored in the long river of time, they may be dazzling, or heavy and sad, but they all help us illuminate the way forward in the way of looking back at the road ahead.
Comments: Analyzed the role of the anniversary: reflection, focus on thinking, fight against forgetting, inheritance... Well organized and well-written. Unfortunately, the first two points overlap slightly. 【55 points under the first category Tianjin volume out of 60 points】
Editor-in-Charge: Gan Qiongfang