Part 1: "Flying Peak" Abbreviation
Guangming Experimental Primary School, Tangshan City, Hebei Province, Wang Jiancheng
Once upon a time, there was a small mountain that could fly on Mount Emei in Sichuan, and there was a monk in the Lingyin Temple in the West Lake, who was crazy all day and played everywhere haha, but people liked him.
One day, he and Ji Qiang still calculated that the strange mountain was going to fly to the village in front of the Lingyin Temple. So he got up on the fifth day and went door to door to tell everyone to move quickly, but no one believed him.
Seeing that noon was about to arrive, the monk ji qiang was in a hurry. At this time, he found that there was a family member who married a daughter-in-law, and he did not care about three seven twenty-one, he put the bride on his back, and ran out of the gate and ran outside the village. This shocked the whole village, and they went after him without a life, but the rich man's family in the east of the village did not move, but stood in front of the door to watch the liveliness.
The monk ran forward with the bride on his back, running to the sun, where he put her down and sat down on the ground himself. People were just about to grab him and beat him, when there was a sudden rumble, and people were shocked and fell. Climbing up and taking a look, they saw that a mountain peak had just landed on their village, and today it was the monk Ji Tuo who saved everyone's lives.
Everyone was homeless, and the monk said that the rich man in the village had been crushed to death at the bottom of the mountain, and that in the future each of you would grow your own land, and if you were not afraid of not being able to build a house, we would be able to hold the mountain down by chiseling five hundred stone arhats on the mountain.
After everyone was busy all night, the five hundred arhats were chiseled, and the monk Ji Qian gave the five hundred stone luos eyebrows and eyes. Since then, the mountain has never been able to fly anywhere else. Because it came from somewhere else, people called it Flying Peak.
Comments: The story content is interesting and touching, the author retained part of the description of the appearance and action of the monk jiqian when abbreviated, which did not feel wordy when reading, but made the character image plump and vivid.
Instructor Hua Zongyan
Part II: Abbreviation of "Hunter Hyllibu"
Jinhua Experimental Primary School, Xingtai City, Hebei Province, An Siying
Once upon a time, there was a hunter named Heilibu, who was eager to help others, and everyone loved him.
One day, Hyreeb went hunting and saved a small white snake from the eagle's mouth. The little white snake is the daughter of the Dragon King, and in order to repay him, let Hai Libu ask for the jewel in the Dragon King's mouth, and hold the gem in his mouth, so that he can understand the language of various animals. But what the animal says can only be known to itself, and once it is said, it will become a stone. The Dragon King thanked Hyreeb and took the gem
Gave it to him.
Since having this gem, Hailib has made it easier to hunt and distribute more food to everyone. One day, while hunting in Hylib, a flock of birds was heard talking about how the mountain would collapse tonight and that the flood would flood the village. Khalibu hurried home and urged everyone to move elsewhere, but no one believed him. Heilibu wants to save the villagers, and the only way to sacrifice himself is to sacrifice himself. He told the truth to the villagers and changed himself
It became a stone.
Everyone regretted and grieved, and they tearfully read The name of Hailib and went far away. In the middle of the night, the flash flood broke out and the village was submerged.
Hailib is commemorated for generations.
Comments: The small author's language expression is concise, rigorous and organized, and he has a good grasp of the main content of the original text, abbreviated the story, the theme is prominent, complete and fluent.
Instructor Yan Xinqiao
Chapter 3: Abbreviated "Hunter Hailibu"
Zhang Zhiyu, Ginkgo Primary School, Anyang City, Henan Province
Once upon a time, there was a hunter named Helibu, who every time he came back from hunting, he had to distribute his prey to everyone, and everyone respected him.
One day, when Hai Libu was hunting, he saw an eagle grasping a small white snake, and he hurried to open his bow and save the little white snake. It turns out that the little white snake is the daughter of the Dragon King, and in order to repay Hai Libu, she can ask her father for the jewel in his mouth. With that gem in it, you can understand the words of animals, but you can only know what you say, and if you say it to others, you will turn into stone.
After Hyreb got the gems, it was easy to hunt. Once, Hyreeb was hunting when he suddenly heard a flock of birds talking, saying that the mountains here were going to collapse and the earth was going to be flooded. After Hai Libu knew, he hurried home to let everyone move away, but no one believed it, and Hai Libu had to tell the villagers everything. As soon as he finished speaking, Heilibu turned into stone.
The villagers saw that Hai Li Bu had turned into stone and regretted it very much, so they commemorated Hai Li Bu for generations.
Comments: The ability of the little author to summarize is amazing! The whole passage is highly condensed in his own language, but the story is clearly narrated, the details are appropriate, and the plot is clear.
Instructor Kang Limin
Chapter 4: Abbreviation of "Hunter Hylib"
Hubei Province, Wuhan Zhuankou Economic Development Zone Triangle Lake Primary School Wei Minglang
Once upon a time, there was a hunter named Heilibu, who was very helpful and everyone respected him very much.
One day, while hunting, Hai Libu saw an eagle catch a small white snake, and he hurriedly saved the little white snake. The little white snake tells Hyreeb that she is the daughter of the Dragon King. In order to thank Heilibu for saving his life, the little white snake said that her family has many treasures that can be given to Helibu. The little white snake also told him that the Dragon King had a jewel in his mouth, and whoever held the jewel could understand what the animal said. But what the animal says can only be known to itself, and if it is said to others, it will become a stone.
Hai Libu followed the little white snake to the Dragon Palace. The old Dragon King was very grateful to Hai Li Bu and gave the gem in his mouth to Hai Li Bu. As Heilibu was leaving, the little white snake repeatedly instructed that no matter what the animal said, it should not be said to others, and if it was said, it would turn into a stone.
With this gem, Hyreb hunted very conveniently. One day, he was hunting in the mountains and learned from the birds that tonight the mountains were going to collapse and the flood was going to flood the village. When Heilibu heard the news, he was shocked. He hurried home to persuade the villagers to move elsewhere, this place can not live! Everyone felt very strange when they heard it, no one believed him, even if Heilibu was so anxious to shed tears, everyone still did not believe him.
Heilibu knows that it is useless to be in a hurry, and if he does not explain why he moved, everyone will not believe it. The only way to save the villagers is to sacrifice themselves. Thinking of this, he told the truth as it was. As soon as he finished speaking, he turned to stone.
Everyone was sad to see Hyrep turned to stone. With tears in their eyes, they read Hailib's name and walked off into the distance. In the middle of the night, the mountains collapsed, and the flood flooded their villages.
People have commemorated Hailibu for generations, and it is said that the stone called "Hailibu" can still be found.
Comments: The article is abbreviated on the basis of the original story, which not only maintains the integrity of the story, but also boldly reduces it while retaining the main plot. The transition between the two short stories is natural, the language expression is fluent, and the literary tone is through.
Instructor Wang Xueying
Chapter 5: Abbreviation of "Silkworm Flower Lady"
Liuyang City, Hunan Province, Teachers' Training School Affiliated Primary School Luo Nian
In the early years, there was a smart and capable girl in the Lifoqiao area of Hangzhou, named Ah Qiao. When he was 9 years old, his mother died, and his father married a harem, and the harem targeted Ah Qiao everywhere.
In the late winter of this year, one day, the queen mother asked Ah Qiao to carry the bamboo basket to cut the grass, and she ran from morning to night, and did not see a trace of grass. She was cold, and her heart was afraid, and she was whimpering and crying. Suddenly, she heard a voice above her head saying, "Cut the grass, halfway up the mountain..." She quickly stood up and saw a white-headed bird flying towards the halfway point, and Ah Qiao ran with the bird.
Running to the middle of the mountain, I found a lot of grass. As he walked, he cut and went to a place where there were many white houses, and many beautiful women in white were picking mulberry leaves. Ah Qiao felt very curious, and the woman in white was also very kind, so Ah Qiao lived with them here.
During the day, they go to pick mulberry leaves together, and at night, they feed these white insects with the mulberry leaves they picked during the day, and these white insects are called silkworms. When the silkworm grows up, the spit out silk forms snow-white balls, and these balls are used to weave silk threads. These colorful silk threads were embroidered for the Emperor of Heaven and the weaver girl for weaving cloud brocade.
Ah Qiao had unconsciously studied here for two months, afraid that his father would be worried. Just the next day, just after dawn, I packed my bags and went down the mountain. Before leaving, I took a few silkworm babies with me. She wanted to go back, say yes to her father, and return here, so she marked the route with mulberry leaves, and she threw them as she walked, and soon she was home.
Ah Qiao found that daddy was already a white-haired old man, and the bad hearted harem had long died, and it turned out that she had gone to a fairyland, and going to a day was equivalent to a year in the human world.
Ah Qiao was ready to go again the next day, but he couldn't find the way anymore, and the mulberry leaves had grown into green trees. She was surprised, and suddenly the white-headed-necked bird said, "Ah Qiao stole the treasure..." Ah Qiao felt a pang of remorse and could only return home.
After returning home, Ah Qiao unreservedly taught everyone what he knew about the techniques of silkworm weaving.
In order to commemorate Ah Qiao's contribution, later generations honored her as "Silkworm Flower Lady".
Comments: The storyline is twisted and moving, and the small author retains the main plot, such as the process of picking mulberries and raising silkworms, and also retains the key information - the words spoken by the white-headed and necked birds, the language is smooth and natural, and the narrative is complete.
Instructor Tang Aiming
Chapter 6: Abbreviation "The Golden Axe, the Silver Axe, and the Iron Axe"
Li Shu, Primary School Affiliated to Liuyang Teachers' Training School in Hunan Province
Once upon a time there was a woodcutter who lived in a village not far from the river and made a living by going to the woods by the river every day to cut firewood.
One day, the woodcutter went to the river to cut firewood as usual, and accidentally fell into the river with an iron axe. The woodcutter was crying by the river. When Heber heard the crying, he asked him why he was crying here, and the woodcutter sadly told the story. The river boy listened, and without saying a word, he went into the river.
After a while, Heber fished out a golden axe. The riverher said to the woodcutter, "Is this your axe?" ”
The woodcutter looked at it, saw the golden sparkle, and replied, "This is not my axe, my axe is not so beautiful in color." ”
Heber burrowed into the water again, fished it out, fished out a silver axe, and asked the woodcutter if it was his axe? The woodcutter replied that it was not yet his axe.
The river boy drilled into the river again and picked up the woodcutter's iron axe, and the woodcutter said happily that it was his axe, and thanked the river boy so much.
Touched by his honesty, Heber gave the woodcutter the gold and silver axes he had just fished.
The woodcutter happily returned home with three axes and met his next-door neighbor. The neighbor found the golden and silver axes in his hand envious, so they asked him the origin of the axe. The woodcutter dropped his axe into the river, and Uncle River told the neighbors about his help.
When the neighbor learned about it, he thought about it for one night, and the next morning he went to the river to cut firewood, deliberately dropped his iron axe into the river, and then sat leisurely by the river, crying loudly.
Heber heard the crying, came out of the water, and asked him why he was crying. Neighbors said they chopped wood and dropped their axes into the river.
Heber fished out a golden axe and asked the neighbor if it was the axe he had fallen. The neighbor couldn't wait to say, "Yes, that's right, that's my axe." ”
He was about to snatch the axe from Heber's hand. Hebo made a clever move and sank into the water with his axe.
At this time, the neighbor was very disappointed, and the golden axe in his hand was suddenly gone.
Comments: There are many repetitions of the original story, and the small author can write these sentences in a general language. At the same time, the author carefully retains the different appearances of the woodcutter and the neighbor when crying, and accurately expresses the characteristics of the characters.
Instructor: Tang Aiming
Chapter 7: Abbreviated "Hunter Hyreeb"
Liu Muran, Chengzhong Experimental Primary School, Jiangyin City, Jiangsu Province
Once upon a time there was a hunter named Helib. He was eager to help others and everyone respected him very much.
One day, when Heilibu went hunting, he found an eagle grabbing a small white snake and flying by. Hai Libu hurriedly saved the little white snake. The little white snake is the daughter of the Dragon King, and she is very grateful to Hai Li Bu and wants to give the treasure of the family to Hai Li Bu. Heilibu didn't care. The little white snake also told Heilibu that the Dragon King had a jewel in his mouth, and as long as he held it, he could understand what the animal said, but he could not tell others what he heard, otherwise it would turn into a stone.
Heilibu followed the little white snake to the Dragon Palace, and the Dragon King thanked him again and gave the jewel contained in his mouth to Heilibu. The little white snake told him not to tell anyone else what the animal said, or it would turn into stone.
Heilibu got gems, hunting is very convenient, and every time he returns from hunting, he gives everyone more prey.
Once he heard a flock of birds say that tonight the mountains here are going to collapse and the flood is going to flood the earth. Hailib was taken aback and ran back to tell the villagers that they would move elsewhere and that they could not live here. Everyone was surprised. Although Heilibu anxiously urged everyone, no one believed him. Heilibu had to sacrifice himself, telling the truth about how to get the gem, how he heard a flock of birds talking about refuge, and why he couldn't tell others the news he had heard. As soon as Helibu finished speaking, he turned into a stone.
Everyone regretted it very much and quickly moved away. That night, the mountain collapsed and floodwaters poured out, submerging the village.
Hailib is commemorated for generations. It is said that the stone of the "Hylibu" can still be found.
Comments: The abbreviated story is complete, the plot is coherent, and the language is smooth, which reflects the certain language skills of the young author.
Instructor Wen Ping
Chapter 8: The Birth of the Monkey King (Abbreviation)
Jiang Yuyang, Maigaoqiao Central Primary School, Nanjing, Jiangsu Province
There are countries overseas, and the name is proud. The country is close to the sea, and there are flowers and fruit mountains. At the top of its mountain, there are sengoku, inner breeding immortals, bursting into monkeys.
One day, the monkeys escaped the heat and played under the matsushita. When I was young, I bathed in a mountain stream, smelled the water, and said, "I don't know where this water comes from?" We have nothing to do, find its source. ”
It is to follow the stream of the mountain, to the source also, to cover the waterfall spring. The monkeys stroked their hands and boasted, "Good water! Good water! ”
He also said, "Whoever has the power, who seeks the source, and does not hurt the body, we are the king." ”
When the monkeys cried out again and again, a stone monkey came out: "I enter!" ”
His eyes crouched down, and he threw himself into the waterfall and spring, and saw that it was a place created by heaven and earth.
The stone monkey was overjoyed, crouched down, jumped out of the water, and said: "This water is a person who suddenly runs under the bridge and hangs upside down to cover the household." There is a stone room, and the room is fully used. There are stone jie, carrying 'flowers and fruits mountain blessed land, water curtain cave cave sky', wide inside, can accommodate thousands of mouths. ”
The monkeys are very happy, and those who are not afraid enter, those who are timid scratch their ears and scratch their cheeks, and the Russians are all in.
The stone monkey said, "I seek this cave heaven, and each enjoys the blessing of a family, so why worship me as king?" ”
All the monkeys hear, that is, the arch is not violated, the order of the tooth class, are called "Chitose King". Since then, the stone monkey has ascended to a high position, hidden the "stone", and is called the Monkey King.
Comments: Small authors can retain the characteristics of the original language, use literary abbreviations to write stories, be bold and innovative, and be very creative. At the same time, it also shows his solid basic skills in literature and literature, which is a characteristic abbreviation.
Instructor: Jiao Weiwei
Chapter 9: The Story of the Zodiac
Ren Zhengxiu of Maigaoqiao Central Primary School in Nanjing, Jiangsu Province
The Jade Emperor wants to choose the zodiac signs, and the animals all want to be selected.
The dragon borrowed a pair of horns from the chicken for the sake of beauty, and let the centipede be the witness; the mouse and the cat were good friends, and the cat was very sleepy, and said to the mouse the day before: "Tomorrow you must remember to wake me up." "Well, tomorrow it will."
The mouse said it, but decided to secretly go to the selection.
Finally the Jade Emperor chose rats, cows, tigers, rabbits, dragons, snakes, horses, sheep, monkeys, chickens, dogs, and pigs.
At first, everyone thought that the cow was the first, but because the rat bribed everyone, everyone changed their mouth to say that the rat was industrious, and the rat became the first genus.
The cat woke up to find that the selection was over and the mouse was still in first place; the cat hated the mouse and bit him when he saw it.
The chicken was jealous of the dragon's high rank and wanted to find the dragon to return to the horn, because the witness centipede did not admit it, and the chicken ate the centipede, and the chicken became the natural enemy of the centipede.
Comments: Although the story is not long, there are many characters and complex relationships. The small author can carefully sort out the clues, summarize the trajectory of the story and development in an orderly manner, and the language is concise and clean.
Instructor Jiao Weiwei
Chapter 10: Hunter Hyllibu Abbreviation
Zhu Kexin, Gupinggang Primary School, Nanjing, Jiangsu Province
Once upon a time there was a hunter named Hylib. Eager to help others, everyone respects him very much.
One day, while hunting, Heilibu saw an eagle grabbing a small white snake, and he rushed to save the little white snake. The little white snake tells Hyreeb that she is the daughter of the Dragon King. In order to thank Hye-d-boo for his life-saving grace, the little white snake wants to send a lot of jewelry to Hyree-eb.
The little white snake told him that the Dragon King had a jewel in his mouth, and with this jewel, he could understand all animals. But what the animal says can only be known to him, and if he says it to others, he will become a stone.
Hyreeb came to the Dragon Palace, and the Dragon King thanked him. Heilibu asked the Dragon King for this precious gem. Before leaving, the little white snake repeatedly told Hai Libu not to tell others what the animal said.
With this gem, Haylib is much easier to hunt. Once, while hunting, Heilibu heard a flock of birds saying that there would be floods and earthquakes here. He quickly ran home and asked the villagers to move, but the villagers did not believe him.
In order to save the lives of the villagers, Heilibu told the whole story of the incident. As soon as he finished speaking, Helibu immediately turned into a stone.
The villagers were very regretful, with tears in their eyes, reading The name of Hai Libu, and moved out.
Comments: The small author grasps the main characters, closely follows the two key plots in the story, uses generalization and rewriting to greatly reduce the original text, the character image is prominent, and the expression is smooth and smooth.
Instructor: Wu Chunxiao
Chapter 11: Abbreviated Story "Cowherd Weaver Girl"
Cao Kaiwen of Xianlin Primary School of Nanjing South Division Affiliated Middle School in Jiangsu Province
In ancient times, there was a child named Niu Lang. He grew up with his brother and sister-in-law. But his brother and sister-in-law always abused him, allowing him to live in a cowshed, with an old cow, living a poor and desolate life.
Niu Lang is very good at taking care of the old cow, he and the old cow are dependent on each other, and the relationship is very close. Year after year, when Niu Lang grew up, his brother and sister-in-law drove him out, and he had to take the old cow to re-establish his home in the mountains.
One night, the old cow suddenly began to speak, saying that the next day at dusk, there would be a group of fairies bathing in the lake, and when the cowherd arrived, he would pick up a pink tunic by the lake, and the one who came to him for clothes would become his wife. Niu Lang listened to the old cow's instructions and met the Weaver Girl in this way. It turned out that the Weaver Girl was tired of the tiring work in heaven and the strict constraints of the Queen Mother, so she sneaked to the human world to play.
The cowherd and the weaver girl fell in love at first sight, so they got married and lived a life. After the two married, the male cultivator and the female weaved, and they were extremely happy. Unfortunately, one day the old cow died, and when he was dying, the old cow told the cowherd to wear his skin if he encountered an emergency.
Trouble did come, the Queen Mother Niangniang, because she hated the Weaver Girl for going down to the world, vowed to severely punish the Weaver Girl, she came to the human world to capture the Weaver Girl, and the cowherd saw it and quickly put on the cow skin and flew up to the sky to chase. When she saw that she was about to catch up, the Queen Mother used the Heavenly River to separate the two people.
From then on, the cowherd and the weaver girl could only look at each other across the river and turn into stars on both sides of the Tianhe River. But the two of them still did not change their original intentions, and after fighting, the Queen Mother allowed them to meet at Queqiao every year on the seventh day of the seventh month of the lunar calendar.
Comments: The small author's creative abbreviation story, on the basis of retaining the main content of the original text, added his own language, especially the use of four-word words appropriately and freely, such as: dependence on life, love at first sight, male cultivator and female weaving, looking across the river, the original intention does not change, etc., condensed expression of the original meaning.
Instructor: Jiao Weiwei
Chapter 12: Abbreviation of "Cowherd Weaver Girl"
Zhang Chengye, East Campus of Jianhu County Experimental Primary School, Yancheng City, Jiangsu Province
Niu Lang's father and mother died since he was a child, and he lived with his brother and sister-in-law. His brother and sister-in-law were very bad to him, and he and the old cow depended on each other. When Niu Lang grew up, his brother and sister-in-law regarded Niu Lang as a thorn in his eye and wanted to separate from Niu Lang. The cowherd got an old cow and a broken car.
The cowherd lives with the old cow and lives a hard life. Under the guidance of the old cow, the cowherd found the weaver girl, and they told each other about their tragic origins and married each other. After marriage, the cowherd weaver girl lived a very happy life, and gave birth to a man and a woman.
Before the old cow died, he asked the cowherd to leave its skin behind and use it for emergency.
Later, when the Queen Mother learned about the Weaver Girl's marriage to Niu Lang in the human world, she was very angry, so she personally came to the human world and arrested the Weaver Girl back to the heavenly court. The cowherd hurriedly took the child and put on the cowhide to chase the weaver girl. The Queen Mother used a jade hairpin to wave behind the Weaver Girl, and a heavenly river blocked Niu Lang. The cowherd weaver girl could only look at each other from a distance across the River of Heaven.
Later, the Queen Mother could not resist the Weaver Girl, so she had to agree to see them once a year on the seventh of July on the flyover.
Comments: The small author's generalization ability is very strong, and the whole text is almost always a general narrative of the story of "Cowherd Weaver Girl" in his own language, which is smooth and natural, and does not drag mud and water.
Instructor: Cui Jianhua
Chapter 13: Abbreviation of "Field Snail Girl"
Jiangxi Ganzhou Wenqing Road Primary School He Kunrong
I am Xie Duan, born during the reign of Emperor An of Jin. I was of good character and honest, and because of the early death of my parents, I was adopted by a neighbor. When I was seventeen or eighteen, I relied on hard work to establish my own portal.
One day, I found a huge snail under the city wall and put it in an urn and raised it.
The next day I went to the fields as usual, and when I came back, I found that the tables that had been empty were full of meals. I thought it was the neighbor who helped me do it, but for several days in a row, I went to the neighbor's house to thank you, who knew that the neighbor said that they did not do it, I was puzzled.
To find out, I went out while the chickens were chirping and came back at dawn. I saw a young girl coming out of the urn. I pushed the door in and asked who she was? Why cook for me? The girl said that she was sent by the Emperor of Heaven to help me, and she had no choice but to expose her identity and leave early. She left the shell of the field and left, I really regret my recklessness, but also grateful, the days are getting better and better.
I was very grateful to the TianLuo girl, and later, I became a local official to benefit one party.
Comments: The small author uses the first-person technique to creatively abbreviate the story, which is refreshing, and the classic "Snail Girl" is shortened to a new flavor, highlighting her help and influence on "me". The plot is concise and complete, and the language is fluent.
Instructor Sun Zhenli
Chapter 14: Abbreviation of "Pauline Lamp"
Yueyang Municipal Courtyard in Hunan Province is attached to Lin Boxuan
Once upon a time, there was a fairy on Mount Hua called the Three Virgins. She lived in the Temple of Our Lady at the top of Lotus Peak, and there was a Pauline lamp next to her, which was a treasure given by the Queen Mother. As long as you use the Pauline lamp to illuminate, no matter which side of the monster beast will escape.
The Three Merciful Virgins often work tirelessly to show people the direction and benefit the people with Pauline lamps. (The Three Madonnas use Pauline lamps to benefit the people, and "kindness" is her quality, which is very correctly preserved!) ）
One day, a scholar came in the temple of Our Lady. This scholar, named Liu Yanchang, was preparing to enter Beijing to catch the examination, but because of the heavy snow, he could not continue to rush, so he came to the Temple of Our Lady to avoid the snow. Liu Yanchang looked at the statue of the Three Virgins and felt admiration, so he inscribed a poem on the wall. The Three Madonnas also looked at Liu Yanchang and were very happy in their hearts. In this way, the two of them held a wedding here and lived a life of love and affection.
Erlang Shen, the brother of the Three Madonnas, knew about this incident, and immediately lit up the Heavenly Soldier Heavenly General and went to Mount Hua to ask for his guilt.
The Three Madonnas were not rivals of the Erlang God and were crushed at the bottom of Mount Hua. At the foot of Mount Hua, the Three Madonnas gave birth to their son Agarwood, wrote a blood book, and entrusted the land god to hand over her son Agarwood to Liu Yanchang. (The young author summed it up in three sentences.)
The content of the three virgins being crushed on the Huashan Mountain and giving birth to the sun incense is clearly organized)
Liu Yanchang, who entered Beijing to take the examination, won the first place in one fell swoop and was appointed as the inspector of Yangzhou. When he came to the Temple of Our Lady again, he saw only a blood letter and a baby. After reading the blood book, he learned that the baby was his son.
After Shen Xiang grew up, she came to Mount Hua again, and with the help of the Thunderbolt Immortal, successfully split the mountain to rescue her mother. (The end is clear and the story structure is complete)
Famous teacher reviews
★ Leave keywords to reflect the quality of the characters: The small author carefully reads the original text, and retains the keywords to reflect the character master
To feature.
★ Clear organization and complete structure: Although the story after abbreviation is short, the main structure of the article is complete and clear.
Language condensation.
(Instructor: Chen Ying)
Chapter 15: The Legend of the White Snake (Abbreviation)
Zhejiang Province Taizhou City Luqiao District Luqiao Street Experimental Primary School Ke Yiyi
At the dawn of the Qing Dynasty, two snake spirits rose from the bottom of the West Lake, one called Bai Suzhen and the other called Xiao Qing.
Suddenly, it was pouring rain in the sky, and Bai Suzhen and Xiaoqing had nowhere to hide. They were worried when a schoolboy held up an umbrella to cover them from the rain. The little scholar said, My name is Xu Xian.
Bai Suzhen and Xiaoqing also hurried to introduce themselves. After that, the three of them often met, and soon Su Zhen and Xu Xian were married and opened a "Boholtang" pharmacy.
The business of "Bohol Hall" became more and more prosperous, and the White Lady cured many people of their diseases, which caused the incense at The Golden Mountain Temple to be unproductive and annoying the monk Fahai.
On this day, Fahai saw that the White Lady was not a mortal, but a white snake! So, he asked Xu Xian to break up with her. Xu Xian did not take his cues, and Fahai locked him up in the temple. The White Lady waited for Xu Xian for a long time and did not return, so she went out to look for it.
Finally, the White Lady heard that Xu Xian had been detained by the Fahai monk of the Golden Mountain Temple, so she and Xiaoqing came to the Golden Mountain Temple to ask Fahai to release Xu Xian. Fahai refused to let anyone go, and the White Lady fought with him. The White Lady was pregnant, but she could not fight the Fahai, and was collected into the golden bowl and pressed under the Leifeng Pagoda.
In the end, Xiao Qing practiced in the mountains for decades, defeated Fahai, forced him into the belly of the crab, and rescued the White Lady.
Since then, they have lived happily together.
Comments: A small author can write such a long folk story in such concise language, the skill is too high! The original text has a lot of details described, rendering plot, the small author with his own highly condensed language to summarize it, both retaining the main plot, but also very concise, awesome!
Instructor Lin Caizhen
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Dream of the Red Chamber 22: The Year of The Year! What is the deep meaning of Jia Mu celebrating the birthday of 15-year-old Bao Chao?
Journey to the West 35: Why Lose? The King of the Golden Horn and the King of the Silver Horn are in the right place
Journey to the West 30 times: White Dragon Horse Savior, Eight Precepts + Sand Monk = Little White Dragon's Strength Value?!
"Journey to the West" 29 times: the great battle of the yellow robe monster, the eight precepts of the pig showed amazing first ability?