Preface
The weekly magazine contains the yuye shiye, which is evaluated to try it, so it is called "weekly jade test". The Book of Verses has clouds: "If it is like cutting, it is like grinding." "Jade is bright and bright, Shenfa will be conducive to appreciation; jade flaws are slightly flawed, and points may be beneficial to the instrument." Poetry friends exchange, exchange collisions, brainstorming, is also expected. The public heart of the critic, the peace of the poet, the appreciation of the reader, the heart of the editor, the holding of these four hearts, the common elegant thing, is not happy!
In this issue of Xiaolou's "Weekly Jade Test" column, guests are invited to choose a number of first comments and publish them in [Xiaolou Weekly (249): 2021 Issue 31]. (Those who voluntarily participate in the Xiaolou [Weekly Jade Test] column, please pay attention to the public account first, and the next guest will leave a message from the back of each weekly or weekly magazine, and choose a number of comments and publish them on all platforms of Xiaolou.) All kinds of xiaolou's comment works will be published in the "Xiaolou Recommended Poems" column group fixed in the "Chinese Poetry Education" paper journal. If you have any objections, please leave a message to contact the editor. ）
Nocturnal slogans
Safety East (Sichuan)
Avoiding the epidemic and avoiding the heat has not yet been achieved, and I am marching towards the mountain at night.
Let it not open its eyes, and its own headlights are clear.
Yang Xinyue commented: Turning the knot to see the spirit. Heaven and earth are unkind and self-cherishing.
Xie Liangkun's comments: Jane is far away.
Jiang Heyou commented: do not open the eyes, a line of light, a moment of ingenuity, can be read.
Fifty years of the first degree, when accompanied by the construction team in the countryside
Wan Dewu (Jiangxi)
Things are like dreams like dreams, little who is fifty springs.
Although the poetry wine is left behind, the wind and dust are more white and new.
It is not necessary to pour thin on the human condition, and the remaining insect is pure.
The Ten Directions of Buddhism are admired, and the amorous Judas are the causes of later.
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Only to lower the dimension in front of people, just like the ancient yin gradually forgot the machine.
Towards the sand bank of the egret, twilight saw the green cow return to the bamboo door.
Three or two winds and days are in conflict.
The lone cup is raised against the barren moon, and the long throwing of the dust is right and wrong.
Yang Xinyue commented: The first song in pride, self-pity, self-promise to see the sigh of the flow of years, the word "xiao who" has deep mourning, the whole qi pulse is clear. The second song sees the spirit of intransigence in the forgetting machine, and has the attitude of head horns. Good poetry. Shun wish Sword Dust Brother a happy life!
Wang Hailiang commented: Many emotions are integrated into deep understanding, and it is quite interesting to speak in a light language. Look at the heart, examine the self, and know the destiny of the fifty truths.
In the mountains after the rain
Meng Xiangrong (Guangdong)
Fresh rain returns, and the afterglow breaks through the twilight clouds.
Seven colors of condensation, not inferior to fire three points.
There are fewer people in the late Bo, and they are self-congratulatory.
Although the hill is close to the city, it is also far away from the dust atmosphere.
Wang Hailiang commented: With the scene, with the complex, calm and calm, the mind is self-aware. "Seven colors of the rainbow, not inferior to the fire of three points", the fire cloud is as seen.
Xie Liangkun's comment: The first half is true. The last four sentences are slightly easier and less businessable.
Night dreams
Zhang Heping (Guangdong)
Man grinds Acacia carefully and grinds it into a spring color into Nanke.
The wind lifted three feet of tender willows, stirring the east window dream nest.
Yang Xinyue commented: The woman's talent is gentle and moving, and the dream is novel and cute.
Jiang Heyou commented: "Mill" word is good, there are strange ideas.
In the summer, climb Mt. Zhongzhong to watch a thunderstorm
Zhang Yulin (Hunan)
Suddenly it rained outside the sky, washing out the Mijiatu.
The mist gathered and dispersed, and the layers of mountains disappeared.
Take the cloud as this moment, and sigh slightly.
I love thunder and thunder, and the mountains and rivers are different.
Yang Xinyue commented: The rain outside the sky, see the height of the mountain; the second joint scene is described meticulously and majestically; the third link is turned appropriately, with a sigh of a drop in the sea; the tail link is high.
Nostalgia is sent occasionally
Jiangnong (Tianjin)
The cannon flashed and the gun fell to the pass, and the white colt and the dog promoted the decline of the face.
Jiashan has no hope of returning, but he is jealous of the floating clouds coming and going.
Yang Xinyue commented: The first half really has the feeling of frost, wind and snow sword, and the years are like knives. The conclusion is good, and the floating clouds are not hindered.
Dujiangyan South Bridge leans into the night
Jiangheyou (Hebei)
The jade belt in front of Yulei Mountain is long, and the distant light is yellow by the railing.
The river is negative and snowy, and the waves and winds are lost to the eternal coolness.
Yang Xinyue commented: This poem is thick and thick, and the proverbable sentences do not necessarily need to be clever.
Cloud Mountain Night Chant
Cui Dehuang (Jiangxi)
Open to the purple smoke, several lights to Que Ming.
The clouds covered the mountains into the darkness, and the wind stopped the birds from flying.
Monk Guiyuan Temple bell urged late, moon washing deep forest dew drops light.
Should wait for Chenglan to float and dawn, idly peeping at the stars and turning to the stars.
Yang Xinyue commented: The description is meticulous and nuanced, making people feel like they are in their own situation. Elegantly worded. Well organized.
Self-conditioning
Jiang Changdian (Hunan)
Borrow a corner of the city to idle, cover the door and go to the deep mountain.
Lanfa is fragrant and green sleeves, and the ink is poured on the face.
The exhibition paper is issued every time because of Jia Xing, knocking on the poem to stay and appreciate the sound to see.
In his lifetime, he did not escape Zen intentions, but he was like a cold monk who closed himself.
Yang Xinyue commented: The first link is to see the high sentiment and ease; the second poem book is pleasant, the elegance is full of paper; the tail link is bound to the law, implying the meaning of "the bench must sit cold for ten years".
Ning people
He Zhiyong (Zhejiang)
Mr. Mister's poems are not meticulous, and the carvings of tigers and leopards are wrong.
White clouds continue to chang'an, green shoes who old forest valley.
There was a cold frost in the xuan qi, and the earth was high and hurt.
At the same time, I was extremely depressed, and the wind and dust in jiangbei and jiangnan were evil.
Yin Shin-kuken Kudome, Tagori Riki death is the first.
The mighty and heroic spirit is not returned, and the wine is soaring in the west.
Yang Xinyue commented: Jiangbei Jiangnan wind and dust, can not comment, good poetry can only be recommended.
Listen to Wu Yu Yangqin's "Vitality" (Part 2)
Ding Weiping (Hefei)
Fiber fingers waved, the string on the machine.
Lao Tzu also read it, and the big sound was enlightened.
Wang Hailiang commented: "Vitality" pun, the big sound is also wonderful.
Yong Ho
Shi Jimin (Shanghai)
Leisurely good dreams round several times, summer pond free day.
The lotus blossoms are red and the fire is better, and the lotus leaves in the field are as blue as smoke.
No vulgar worries can be floating white, even if there is a style, it is not mysterious.
Ren is late autumn and withered, and the silver hook iron stroke is also Xiao Ran.
Wang Hailiang commented: Writing a life of lotus, "no vulgar worries can be floating white, even if there is a style, it is not mysterious", which is a portrayal of character, "Ren is dry in late autumn, and the silver hook and iron stroke are also Xiao Ran", which is even higher.
Qinghe Temple ancient laurel tree
Chen Yong (Guizhou)
Fertile soil with a crown cap.
Watch over the Qinghe Temple, shelter the Yinjin ferry.
Habitually overturned rain, idle green cold smoke.
Years meet the west wind, more incense full of river.
Xie Liangkun's comments: The poem is slightly scattered. The idiomatic verses seem to be incisive.
The scene of the reservoir after the rain (rhyme)
Li Xiangqing (Zhejiang)
Smoke light water clouds light, light ink a trace who painted.
The first letter of heaven is a lot of magic, only should be simple and not increased.
Xie Liangkun commented: Good conclusion.
Dream back to the mountain village of childhood
Xiao Fangzhu (Fujian)
The road is full of wind and rain, and the vicissitudes are easy to get involved.
Yun Shan Qing dreamed of childhood and retired to his hometown for thirty years.
Xie Liangkun commented: Well conceived, the last two sentences are excellent. The vicissitudes of the sentence can be refined.
Butterfly Loves Flowers and then to The Judges College of Immortal Island
Special (Liaoning)
The career of escaping the epidemic is the same as the cocoon. Peach blossoms, blooming and falling unattended. The summer blue pile is full as usual, and it is only a lot of green moss to start again.
People are sad and happy in middle age. Evening light flowing clouds, always blown away by the wind. A flat sand returns slowly, and the sea and sky are far away from the stars.
Xie Liangkun commented: Clear and flowing and see the emotion. The opening sentence is new and gratifying.
On May 11, friends pier reunion has a feeling
Wang Yingchun (Zhejiang)
The scenery is still the same, and the wind fills the small building.
A note of elegance, a few years of blue eyes.
Dealing with the world is the same as the liver and gallbladder, and the floating life has its own joys and sorrows.
Raise a cup of tea instead of wine, dripping in your heart.
Jiang Heyou commented: It is not easy to write together, and it is easy to flow into clichés. This jaw joint and neck joint are all fine police and explosive.
Listen to the rain
Zhong Xiaohong (Guangdong)
The sound of the partitions is asphalt, and the wet fog is blowing.
Blocks are dissipated and accumulated, and poems and books are hanging down.
The flood is flooded, and the worry is that Yuzhou is in danger.
Intermittently, for whom is the sky crying?
Jiang Heyou commented: Shusheng's heart, led out from the sound of rain, cut the rain into a disaster, can be described as natural.
June Gangnam Morning Market
Wang Jianqiang (Hebei)
Bamboo bearers were picked to take advantage of the breeze, and Grandma called to sell Xiao Loudong.
Wild bees with flowers and wild vegetables are frequently fluttering, and fireworks are in the middle of a city.
Jiang Heyou commented: Fresh and vivid, the silhouette of the morning market, the well-cut, but also see the poet's pleasant state of mind.
Overlooking
Ye Yongxin (Guangdong)
Futu towered calmly and calmly, showing off the Copper Mountain Pine.
Alone on the West Building Shu yuanmu, one day wind and rain to see the flag peak.
Jiang Heyou commented: The last sentence is good. The first sentence "calmly" can be considered.
Natsugure Komura
Zheng Dengping (Hubei)
Qing Yang Lian Guo smeared XiaHui, and the white mandarin fluttered into the shadows.
The small courtyard who roared, the willow pond geese and ducks sang back.
Jiang Heyou commented: The summer dusk scenery of Jianghan Village is like at present, the first two sentences are colored, the last two sentences write sounds, the sound and color are cooperative, the rules are orderly, and they are quite vivid.
Bu Operator, Neighbor Girl Tu Rong
Lone Carnivore (Wuhan)
I'm a child, you're the girl next door. The Twin Towers are high on the opening windows, ticking the overpass rain.
There is no basis for growth, and it is the master of it. The sound of rain is empty and cool at night, can you hear, childhood?
Jiang Heyou commented: The story is told from the beginning, and the blank space is intriguing.
Guest Profiles in this issue
Guest Ranking In order
Yang Xinyue Zhai listened to the rain leaning on the Qinglou and sat in the night room, a teacher of the No. 4 Middle School of Xiangxiang City, the vice president of the Xiangxiang Poetry Society, the Bihu Poetry Society of Gukaifu Temple, the reading mountain poetry society, the founder of the Changsha Liangtang Poetry Association, the director of the Chengshe Society, and the member of the poetry platform of "Listening to the Rain in the Small Building".
Wang Hailiang Hebei people, character Tao'an, net name Hai Tianyi. He is a member of the Ziyue Poetry Society, the Fenglong Poetry Society, and the Banmutang Poetry Society, and a member of the poetry platform review committee of "Xiaolou Listening to the Rain". He won the 2015 Poetry Journal's Annual Youth Poetry Award.
Xie Liangkun, whose screen name is Gao Han, is a native of Chengdu and a middle school teacher. Vice President of Minshe.
Jiang Heyou, the master of Bai Shiyi, Ph.D., is a professor at the College of Literature of Hebei Normal University. He is the executive director of the Chinese Lexicology Society, a director of the Chinese Poetry Teaching Association, and a member of the poetry platform review committee of "Listening to the Rain in a Small Building". He is the author of "History of Ming and Qing Dynasty Word Genealogy", "Baishi Zi Manuscript", "Outline of Song Dynasty Literature" and so on.
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