Writing skills to explore
Flashback: According to the needs of the plot arrangement, the ending of the event or an important fragment is mentioned in front of the article, and then continues to narrate from the beginning of the event in the original order of development.
The magic of flashbacks: It can avoid the monotony and rigid narrative structure of the article, which can enhance the vividness of the article and make the article suspenseful and tortuous.
Flashbacks apply in the following cases:
1. Bring the content that best represents the topic to the front in order to highlight the theme.
2. In articles with relatively simple and bland plots, improve the expression effect by changing the structure of the article or creating suspense.
However, regardless of the circumstances in which flashbacks are applied, the content and form of the events described should be fully considered, and flashbacks must not be made for the sake of flashbacks.
Open a window
Xiamen a candidate
Looking at the lively shadow of the girl when she left, I fell into contemplation for a moment. The girl taught me how to open a window for the soul.
Summer was greeted by the sound of cicadas, but in the bottom of my heart I hated summer, sweating, and the heat did not give you a chance to escape. So in the summer, my heart also became impetuous.
One day, I came out of cram school and arrived at the station, where the sun was dripping like an oily egg yolk, the sky seemed to make a sound similar to wheezing, the station sign seemed to be scorched, and the lake in the distance seemed to be boiling. (The author gives full play to his imagination and portrays the summer heat into three points) What a ghost weather! I muttered.
But my savior came, a bus drove up, and I jumped on it desperately and found a place to sit down. At some point, there was a girl two or three years younger than me sitting next to me, holding a bottle of mineral water in her hand like me, and the weather was so hot that I drank it early. (The author naturally introduces the little protagonist of the article, the little girl, and the important prop, the mineral water bottle, to pave the way for the content of the following article, cleverly and naturally.) ）
Brother, can you help me open the window? A sweet word came from the side, and I turned my face sideways to see that the girl was wearing two braids, with porcelain-like smooth white skin, and a smile on her face.
What window is opened, the air conditioner is turned on in the car, and when the window is opened, won't it be hot for me? I joked.
The little girl pointed her finger out the window, motioning to look out. In the eyes, it was like a huge sack, it seemed to contain a lot of plastic bottles, and the line of sight moved down, it was a small old man, his back was bent like a shrimp, his skin was scorched by the scorched sun, he walked barefoot, his facial features gathered, his expression was painful, obviously, he made a living by picking up rags. (Through meticulous observation, the author vividly outlines the physical characteristics of the elderly.) Charred skin, stooped back, bare feet – the image of a scavenger in the heat of the summer is really moving. ）
The bus was encountering traffic jams, and the old man was getting closer and closer, so I turned my face and saw the girl's eyes that were as clear as a spring, and I froze.
The red light turned to a green light, and I seemed to be pricked by a needle, and when the window was opened, the girl handed the bottle in her hand to me, and the old man caught the two bottles, looked up, and gave us a kind smile. The car started, and I saw the old man's back drifting away, as if he understood something.
When a person gently pushes open the window of his heart and offers his help to others, he receives more, because at this moment, the warm spring sun of March also shines through the window and quietly shoots into the atrium, so that the soul is no longer hazy. (The author's small feelings expressed at the end sublimate the main theme of the article while pointing out the topic - to raise the open car window to the open heart window.) ）
Comments: This is a clear and vivid exam essay.
In order to make the structure of the article clear and staggered, the author begins by writing that the back of a little girl makes "I" fall into contemplation, set up suspense, and grab people first; then unfold the narrative in the recollection, telling the touching scene and moving the heartstrings; the ending further reveals the feeling of "I", echoing from beginning to end, fascinating. In addition, in the limited number of words, the portrayal of characters and environments in the article is three points, which can be said to be closely related to the author's meticulous observation ability and accurate grasp of the main characteristics of the characters. The innocence and kindness of the little girl, the hardships and hardships of the old man, under the author's delicate brushstrokes, have become more and more vivid, as if they have emerged in front of the reader.
Deep in the heart
Gansu a candidate
Hot tears flowed down my cold cheeks, but they warmed my heart. I looked up at my father's eyes with pity and guilt. It's really like a clear stream in a stream. He gently stroked my head and made me feel the kind of love my dad had for me that words could not describe.
Originally. That's called touching... (Set the transition segment cleverly.) A short sentence not only played a role in pointing the topic, but also achieved the top and bottom. ）
It was the end of the day. It was already dark. I hurried home, and as soon as I opened the door, I saw my father in an apron and a spatula in his hand, and then I remembered that my mother had gone on a business trip.
My dad and I have always lacked a common topic. So I sat at my desk and prepared to write my homework, and as soon as I touched my pocket, I wet my forehead in cold sweat and my wallet disappeared.
I quickly put down the pen in my hand, rummaged through my pocket and bag to know that there was my living expenses for the week, but I found nothing for a long time, and I cried urgently.
Dad heard the noise and ran, and I pulled him eagerly and told him incoherently that his wallet was missing. Who knew that Dad just said "Oh" after listening to it, and then turned around and went back to the kitchen. (The eagerness of "me" contrasts sharply with Dad's indifference, and with this emotion, "I" is even more justified.) ）
I was stunned there, though I knew that Dad was a man of poor expression. But I still couldn't stand his woodiness and indifference, and the tears still couldn't be stopped.
That night, I dreamed of my mother's smiling face and comforting words...
The next day, I got up early and deliberately turned the computer to maximum in the study, playing rock music. Dad stood indifferently in the doorway looking at me.
"You kid, got up so early in order to play?" See what time it is! Don't have to go to class today?" (Dad's indifferent language acts as a booster for plot development, making the contradiction between "me" and Dad escalate again.) ）
My mother's smiling face came to my mind again, and grievances and anger came together. (With the gentle and amiable image of the mother, it sets off the character characteristics of the father who is not good at words and wooden.) I put my bag on my back and threw down the next sentence: "You don't have to take care of my business!" Then slam the door and go.
Sitting in the bright classroom, I wrote my morning reading homework with my cheeks held. Dad's figure flashed in the window on the door, and I tightened my heart and walked out of the classroom. The father in front of him, his nose was red, his hands were already frozen purple, and he must have been running in the cold wind for a long time. I pretended not to care and asked him what was wrong. Dad did not speak, the frozen hand slowly took out the wallet from the coat, took out three hundred yuan from it and put it in my hand, and said softly: "This is for you to live for a week, more money to buy yourself a wallet." It's not too late in the morning!"
Seeing that I could not speak, he smiled and touched my head a few times, then quickly disappeared at the end of the corridor.
I stood where I was, feeling only that the cold hand was like the winter wind, blowing somewhere in my heart, but deeply warming another place.
Comments: This article describes an ordinary little thing, portraying a rather typical father who loves his children but is not good at expressing himself. However, it is in such ordinary and typical that we feel the kind of "love that words cannot describe" that the author wants to express. So, how does the author portray this mundane emotion deeply into people's hearts?
First of all, in the structural arrangement of the article, the author adopts the method of flashbacks, so that the article has structural ups and downs, thus avoiding the monotony of flat and direct narration; secondly, from the perspective of the narrative content of the article, the author adopts the writing technique of first suppressing and then rising and contrasting, so that the reader's reading mood changes with the emotional ups and downs of "I" in the article, and after a series of emotional preparations, the plot twists are introduced, and finally, The main thrust of the article, silent fatherly love and wordless emotion, is presented to the reader very naturally.
