"Snow Eagle Lord": An excellent running account for playing a play

This drama has a lot of scenes, and each period of time is longer, and there are many plots of group fights, and the camera movements and moves are also good. However, a drama with so many plays makes the audience feel that it is not bloody enough, and the reason is because the script is so bad.

The storyline of this play is a running account pieced together by the material library, no focus, no ups and downs, no tension, no depth, watching is equal to not watching, a word does not agree to start fighting, the audience can't remember why everyone fought, why they fought so hard, how much everyone sacrificed and received after these fights.

Seriously lack the foreshadowing guidance of the plot, no matter how many scenes are just to give the audience an eye addiction, what you forget when you turn your head, how much you expect to remain in your memory.

The screenwriter of the play does not understand the scoring module at all, and does not know what should be expanded in detail and what should be omitted after dividing the module. Next, I will pick up a little bit of how these plots should be written.

1. The massacre

There are two key parts of this plot - "Family Fun" and "Divine Bow".

How much laughter there is ahead can reflect how tragic it was when the door was destroyed. In the play, only a detailed story of the father and the snow eagle releasing the little wolf unfolds, and the other family scenes are all watching the flowers. The most ridiculous thing is that the mother's interaction with the bluestone is quite small, and she has always been snowy eagle, as if the bluestone was picked up.

In fact, this plot should be written as a detailed group drama, not only the interaction between father and son, but also the interaction between the brothers of Snow Eagle Bluestone, the mother's care for the two sons, the tacit understanding between the father and the mother and the worry and comfort for the future, the scenes of the two uncles should also be detailed, because their love will continue to ten years later, so not only to portray the interaction between the uncle and the two young masters, but also to portray their loyalty to the father, and the father can superficially appease his wife's worries, But turning around and sharing his thoughts with his uncle can also mention the future education of his sons.

And the family drama in the play is relatively dull, I feel that I have a reunion dinner, put a little wolf, and sleep at night to catch up with the extinction, and the abruptness of the disaster falling from the sky is greatly reduced.

Another focus is on "Divine Bow", in which there are only a few lines of mother-son dialogue before the door is destroyed, and then the snow eagle pulls the bow and shoots arrows when the door is destroyed. In fact, this place was originally a good foreshadowing, write a few more words about Little Snow Eagle's curiosity and ambition for the divine bow, which can hint at his innate tacit understanding with powerful forces, and can also lay the groundwork for his strong and tenacious character, followed by the portrayal of the mother's mentality of wanting to talk and stop pulling the bow of the snow eagle, looking forward to it shows that she hopes that her son will do something in the future, and a little hesitation indicates that she does not want her son's ancient bloodline to be discovered by the outside world.

As a result, there is no focus in the play, and the running account records the family life of the male protagonist when he was a child.

2. Grow up

How the male protagonist has condensed the snow eagle leader as the "snow eagle leader" in the past ten years, I am really curious. The portrayal of the male protagonist at home in the play is only that in addition to practicing guns is to eat, and then when the female protagonist is brought home, it is warmly welcomed by everyone. The plot of the male protagonist is to play with guns, interspersed with a few symbolic line transitions.

In fact, the first plot of the male protagonist when he grows up can be portrayed with pyrotechnics, you can add more plots where the two uncles rack their brains to lure the male protagonist to rest, and you can also group drama the reaction of other servants in the family to this young master, and how the entire people of the Snow Eagle Leader view and spit on their young master who practices martial arts all the time.

In the scene of Snow Eagle Ridge, the only thing that makes me feel the fireworks the most is when the female protagonist and the male protagonist are at home, the male protagonist and his younger brother rob things, and finally give the female protagonist this detail

Third, Lei Chaoya

The scene of saving the mother is still the best place for the rhythm in the first few episodes, the reason is that the plot comes with a climax, and this climax happens to have its own fighting plot, and this plot does not need any group performance to assist.

But carefully figure out the logic of the context, the male protagonist's force value is not enough to give away the head alone, it is really an IQ drop, and the same IQ drop is also this uncle, the male protagonist has broken the door before belated, the mother just teleported the male protagonist to the thunder tide, as long as the uncle orders his subordinates to quickly look around, the probability is still able to catch the male protagonist before the two uncles. As a result, in the play, this uncle has been dead set on his sister.

4. Water Source Taoist Temple

This paragraph is a typical brainless concave plot, if it is not the screenwriter who does not care, then the screenwriter's logical level is too poor.

The male protagonist's pepper face lie detector is a very bad story, or a low-end version of the original story, so the focus of this plot portrayal should obviously be on the male protagonist's motivation and mentality, rather than ordinary storytelling.

There is an obvious bug in the plot logic:

That disciple spread rumors too deliberately, the male protagonist obviously just happened to pass by, he had to press the head male protagonist is with the devil, in fact, the male protagonist of this place can explain the misunderstanding in a word, he only needs to say that the whereabouts of the Changfeng Knight were told to him by the owner of the Longshan Building, and the male protagonist proved his innocence in seconds, let alone everyone had to break it up, and finally decided to let the male protagonist go to the Water Source Taoist Temple to prove his innocence.

How exactly should this place be changed?

Change to the male protagonist found that Xiu Ran eagerly blamed himself, and he could set himself on fire without moving, not only did not explain, but induced himself to be very suspicious, so as to follow the Taoist Temple to prove his innocence. The male protagonist wants to use this opportunity to show his intelligence in front of the Changfeng Knight, so that it is more convenient for him to get the opportunity to get the entrance exam, and there is no need to mention how he rubbed to Chiqiu Bai through the Longshan Tower to the news, and he can also walk with the female protagonist all the way, so as to echo everyone's thoughtful evaluation of the male protagonist later.

5. Changfeng College

The daily life of the academy as a whole is ugly, I think it is not necessarily the second female and Situ Hong actors who add drama, but the stupid screenwriter himself is so stealing the beam and changing the column to start the story.

In fact, there are only three things told in the daily life of the college: first, Kong Youyue's love story that cannot be pursued; second, Situ Hong's blackening process; Third, Chi Qiubai and Xiaoxi's heaven and man are forever separated.

And it is enough to change the protagonist of the story, but after changing the protagonist, it is only repeated the same action repeatedly, Kong Youyue is always attentive to the male protagonist and ignored, Situ Hong is always secretly sulking when he hears others' evaluation of Xueying, it is strange that such a monotonous and stereotypical supporting story is not boycotted by the audience.

The male and female protagonists are not called scenes when they appear on camera, the male protagonist does something to help Situ Hong get angry, the female protagonist sees Kong Youyue's diligent reaction to the male protagonist, this is called foreshadowing and reaction, these are not the hero and heroine's own stories, these are called the corner leftovers in the supporting role story, it is really rare for the protagonist to provide auxiliary foil to the supporting role.

How should the daily life of the college be changed?

First of all, the scene should be shortened as a whole, the male protagonist thinks about saving his mother every day, in addition to occasionally paying attention to the female protagonist, where is the energy to take care of others.

Secondly, increase the unique interaction between the male and female protagonists, they have a common point is family, the male protagonist is owned and lost, the female protagonist is completely without past memories, as the male protagonist grows up and sees his mother once, the female protagonist remembers a little vague memory, there are more private words between them to chat, the female protagonist reassures the male protagonist not to rush to achieve quick results, the male protagonist reassures the female protagonist not to be anxious and confused.

Then the other student groups count a little, don't knock on the two actions of the second female and Situ Hong, and in addition to the repetition of their scenes in the play, Situ Rong is always the same provocative, which really shows the lack of thinking of the screenwriter.

In fact, it is unreasonable for Puyang Bo to blame Situ Hong not to save the male master, purely in order to promote Situ Hong's blackened tool man, and later it turned out that everyone did not go to save the male lord, the academy continued to take classes, but the female protagonist was distracted. Then the male protagonist was tied up for an episode at the bottom of the valley, and occasionally was inserted by several shots of alms. How the female protagonist planned to save the male protagonist step by step The process of saving the male protagonist alone was not carried out in detail, and only after seeing the male protagonist did she make up a rough memory scene, which is not as specific as "Situ Hong is blackened again".

6. After the Black Wind Cliff

The plot of the Black Wind Divine Palace is still okay overall, on the one hand, the story itself is not bad, on the other hand, perhaps because the scenes of the demon race are not very routine, there are always some IP itself settings.

However, the academy scene in sync with this continues to be awkward. Not only did all the staff accept the result of the male protagonist falling off the cliff so easily, the female protagonist secretly went to save the male protagonist, instead of jumping off the cliff and martyrdom, the Changfeng Knight and the female protagonist master can directly determine that the female protagonist is also hanging, which is really a big score.

Everyone has to wait for the male protagonist to wake up before going to the Black Wind Divine Palace, and the logic of this plot is also quite strange, because the male protagonist falls, and the female protagonist is looking for a way to go down, asking the situation at the bottom of the end, how to say that the female protagonist knows more than the male protagonist.

Situ Hong continued to be a demon, first blamed the male protagonist for not recognizing his brother under the cliff, and then all kinds of angry brushing existence rushed to the limelight before the elders, we don't know if the line of Changfeng Academy is more miserable, and it was assigned to the screenwriter with the worst level in the screenwriting team. On the female second's side, there are a few plot points, the content is relatively simple, but the good thing is to explain the logical relationship between cause and effect clearly, except that in this sensitive period, the female second sneaks home with the male second, and does not even dare to say that she takes a positive leave, only dares to cut first and then play, Changfeng College has no reaction to such unusual behavior.

The plot of Ji Rong and his brother is not bad, after all, Ji Rong has not appeared for a long time, just began to walk the CP plot, and it didn't take long to directly turn over the black face, which is the most unexpected plot setting in the logical and reasonable range since I chased this drama.

7. The main line of disappearance?!

The plot is now in episode 22, but I really can't remember what the male and female protagonists' own lines are doing: the male protagonist is also participating in the extraordinary trial and saving his mother, but his mother was captured by the demon race, and then where to help if there is a problem; The female protagonist's side is running around with the male protagonist, occasionally fainting, remembering a little memory.

In the entire plot, you can't see the macro layout of the male or female protagonist, it's completely step by step, participating in the trivial affairs of friends every day, and their own business is completely unconcerned (of course, the male and female protagonists are innocent, and it is completely the screenwriter's serious lack of plot portrayal of the male and female protagonists, resulting in them only being reaction).

Then let's take a look at this series of noisy side plots:

(1) Szeto Hong Branch Line:

I named it "the most annoying branch of the whole drama", not only did Situ Hong repeatedly repeat the same paragraph of OS to Dongbo Xueying, but also broke down the characters of other characters in order to forcibly cooperate with his blackening.

Situ Hong went to the Changfeng Knight to ask him to teach the moves he taught the snow eagle, the Changfeng Knight refused him because his cultivation was not enough, this is normal, but any normal master, at this time, should be compensated, can not teach difficult spells, then can always teach some low-level to lay the foundation, this play can be good, only wrote the part where the Changfeng Knight refused Situ Hong, isn't this completely partial, let Situ Hong be taught to fend for himself, is it really this side line plus drama is better than no drama, plus are all bug plays.

It can be seen from the later plot that in addition to the jealousy of Dongbo Xueying, what led Situ Hong to blacken was that he thought that his aunt was biased, so he was actually jealous of Si Borong, so there was no need to repeatedly exaggerate his and Dongbo Xueying's affairs in the front of the plot, plus a few more resentments against the Si family, this plot can also be effectively promoted, and then there is the particularly funny "My aunt learned that Si Borong was missing, and specially came to Changfeng College to incite Situ Hong to slap him", what does the screenwriter think about this brain circuit, It's really a play for a play.

(2) Presbyterian Branch:

I call it "the most sloppy feeder".

The actors of the Presbytery are actually very well chosen, and each image is also very distinctive, but the plot design is completely a tool for other side lines, not only going through the scene, but also too lazy to perfect the logic.

At the beginning, the plot portrayed the decision of the Elders to punish the Si family for forever guarding the Well of God and Devil, and the perfunctory handling of Mo Yangchen like an Easter egg, made me always think that this group of old men was the existence of villains, plus the later handling of the Demon Senior Brother had no head and no tail, and after seeing the six-sided sword of the Long Wind Knight for help, he was still hesitant and full of doubts, making me think that they were a group of selfish and independent people.

It wasn't until the Snow Eagle led the battle, the uncle sacrificed himself to close the entrance to the tomb, and the Lord of He Shan worked hard to set up the sealing enchantment, that I found that the people of the Presbyterian Church were just a little conservative, but the blood was still hot, and they also knew how to sacrifice and cooperate.

In fact, as long as you write more ink in the previous plot, explain in detail the root causes of the differences between the elders, explain the reasons why everyone insists on their own positions, or explain the complex thoughts in their hearts, and show the multifaceted nature of human nature, it will not give the audience the illusion that "they are all bad people".

(3) Ji Rong & Dongbo Bluestone Branch Line:

I didn't find this pair very annoying before, but as the series progressed, Dongbo Qingshi's repeated refusal to listen to advice made people very speechless, and here can only prove once again the barrenness of the screenwriter's vocabulary.

In fact, Ji Rong is not so strict in doing things, she sometimes gives too much courtesy, such as the time when she reprimanded the guard guard, what she should do most as a suspected guest is to keep a low profile, as if she is invisible, most hope that everyone forgets her existence, so that it can be convenient to act, in the play she deliberately pleases, in fact, there is no silver here three hundred taels.

Dongbo Qingshi's trust in Ji Rong could have been portrayed in layers, at least he should also seriously consider the advice of his brothers and uncles, and carefully infered, even if he proved that Ji Rong was innocent again after infering, it was much stronger than the bear child style of directly "not listening and not listening" in the play.

(4) Kong Youyue Branch Line:

Miss Kong no longer chased the male protagonist to show favor, and as other branch problems continue to be exposed, this branch line that is particularly annoying in college life is now less annoying. Recently, there are not many scenes of the male and female two, that is, the female second father hires someone to sha the female protagonist, and then takes on an interaction between the male and female two, in most cases, team combat requires the female second's vision specialty navigation.

Overall, as long as I don't play car talk and hit the wall, at least I still have tolerance for this plot.

(5) Changfeng Knight Branch:

This is the most effective side line of the whole drama, and it is also the only branch line that does not make up time in the excessive water plot at present, even if the male protagonist's plot is taking the content of this side line, I am quite happy to accept it.

Chiqiu Bai pretended to be sincere, which is the more interesting story advancement in recent episodes, and it has also been deployed on the side of the demon race. In fact, the nail of the demon race reacted more violently on Chiqiubai, and the male protagonist was protected by the ancient bloodline, although he could feel the existence of the nail, but it was not so difficult, so when Chiqiubai said "I didn't expect Snow Eagle to endure so much", I really wanted to tell him "You think too much, Snow Eagle is really not as painful as you." Master is a good master and was moved by his drama.

PS: The most ridiculous thing about this drama is that the narrative sense of martial arts is stronger than that of literary drama, I feel that martial arts and literary drama should not be filmed by the same director, the shooting effect of the Snow Eagle Battle is really quite good, and it has also led to a recovery in the state of recent episodes, but that is, it can be slightly better, in essence, it still can't get rid of the drag of the bad script that seriously lacks the protagonist play.

VIII. The Palace of the Fire

The recent content can be slightly better, and the reason is that the plot of the Presbyterian Church has begun to be written seriously, so the plot of the Fire Palace is okay.

There are really a lot of things that the elders can write, such as who should be in the latent demon race, it is already obvious, and he deliberately strengthens the existence of Mo Yangchen in front of the Lord of Mount He, which is to stimulate the self-esteem of the Lord of Mount He, let the black and white sacred mountains act alone, and if everyone in the elder council does not get together, naturally they will not supervise each other, and it will be difficult to find his problems. And some small frictions within the Presbyterian Council, not looking at each other so well, but also supportive, including some complaints about the Long Wind Knight, these are good details to portray.

Situ Hong and Qingshi Ji Rong's chanting double line is still ugly, and it is still the original broken things repeatedly.

Kong Youyue's plot is second only to the ugly of the previous double line, how can it suddenly be impulsive and irritable, the lines are quite long, the wording is very simple, but compared to the double line of chanting, it is still a new plot, so I included it in the second category of ugly branches.

The plot of the Fire Palace can be regarded as improving the initiative of the male protagonist's planning, and the heroine's life history has finally been revealed, and finally there is a little progress in the heroine's independent line. Suddenly found that this drama has ten episodes to finish, and the male and female main lines don't say anything at all, they are all stories that break the supporting roles. In fact, how did the heroine decide to go to Longshan Tower to check her life, what is the specific content of independent action, there is a lot of content that can be written, but the screenwriter does not write ah, shaping the heroine into someone else's leg pendant.