Commentary on the Poetry of Ge Ming Cao
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insomnia
Text/Deng Wanfa
Falling night, the front foot of a typhoon
Brought a leg of seawater
Step into the city. It rained heavily and kept going
Two points in the middle of the night. heart
With the typhoon, the falling flowers were strung together
Strung up the lost seashells of the beach
The heart is strung together by a gust of wind
The typhoon kept rushing, I don't know
Where is she going? I started to panic
For fear of falling into a deep hole in the darkness. Tomorrow
Those shady road trees, will they blow down?
Make an appointment with the dawn of dawn, will it come?
The more I think about it, the more anxious I become. The earthworm crawled onto the bed
The sound of the wind and raindrops, and the rustle of leaves
The ears are ringing incessantly. night
It's going on, the typhoon is going on
October 2021
赏析
The world is afraid of bad natural weather, and typhoons are a disaster for coastal cities, and this kind of disaster is almost once a year, and reading this poem against such a background can completely understand the poet's anxiety. At two o'clock in the middle of the night, there is no intention to sleep, and for the sensitive poet, the brain must be in a state of disordered fantasy. Through the combined description of the immediate imagery and the fantasy imagery, the development of the matter seems to be very certain, after all, there is a reference to the past experience. The poet is still full of doubts, and under the influence of complex emotions, the whole person falls into chaos. The rhythm of the poem goes all the way up with the change of the poet's state of mind. And the poet may not have slept all night.
The first section describes the situation of the typhoon. The poet wrote relatively calmly, because it was just night, and his attention had not yet been fully focused on the typhoon, but he just kept raining with one stroke. The more meaningful description of this section is "the falling night", "the front foot of the typhoon", and "one leg of the sea stepping into the city", which is very exquisite in the use of words and anthropomorphic techniques, and the typhoon rain is still written with a bit of romance.
Looking at the second stanza, the rhythm of the poem is completely different. As time passed, it came to two points of profundity, and at this time, the poet had no intention of sleeping, and his heart had been restrained by the typhoon. His thoughts are probably also a mess, and the poet thinks of the falling flowers for a while, and cares about the shells on the beach for a while, and becomes distracted. The description of the psychological trajectory and the rapid change of rhythm reflect from the side that the typhoon at this time is stronger, and the poet's heart is more chaotic.
In the third stanza, the poet at this time no longer cares about sleep, but cares about the direction of the typhoon, the green trees on the roadside, and the dawn of dawn. From this, it can be seen that the poet seems to have entered a state of emptiness, and a sense of worrying about the world is particularly strong. Perhaps only a poet can think like this, this is a different kind of thinking, with altruism. And these multiple questions make it more difficult for the poet to calm down in the black hole of thinking, but it is getting worse and worse.
In the fourth stanza, the emotional climax goes one step further. From doubts to anxiety, the bad mentality has reached its peak. Then, through the auditory description, the anxious atmosphere is rendered, and the restless feeling is also transmitted to the reader. "The earthworm crawled into bed", this is definitely a rare thing for people who have not experienced it, this natural image capture, I am afraid that birds, beasts, insects and fish are sleepless tonight. The sound of wind and rain, the rustling of trees, is endless, as if a typhoon has become a ventriloquist. The emotions mixed with this writing are diverse, and the reader, as the second creator, tries to put himself in that situation to feel the poetry. The last sentence "The night continues, the typhoon continues", and the insomnia continues. The poet's anxious heart reaches its climax, and the ending also leaves the reader with room for uncertain imagination. The exact damage caused by the typhoon will have to be determined at dawn.
This poem is emotionally progressive, the rhythm of the poem is getting stronger and stronger, and the addition of audio-visual illusions enriches the content of the poem and creates a poetic scene. For readers who have never experienced a typhoon transit, this poem can serve as an empirical reference. The completely different descriptions at the beginning and end of the poem can confirm that the poet has changed dramatically. Finally, the whole poem ends with insomnia, creating an opportunity for readers to create a second creation, which makes the poetry mature and sophisticated, which is worth referring to and learning.
Throwing bricks and leading jade, discussing poetry on poetry, and learning by writing, this is the end. If you have different opinions, please feel free to communicate in the comment area. If you have a recommended poem, please leave a message to let me know, enjoy it together, and make progress together. I am the poet Ge Ming Cao, welcome to pay attention, see you in the next issue of poetry review!
Author: Deng Wanfa, 15 years in the army, with the rank of major, worked in the government department of Zhongshan City, and later founded a business and did business. Passionate about poetry.