Commentary on the Poetry of Ge Ming Cao
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I really want to let time flow like this
Text/Deng Wanfa
I really want to let time flow like this
Watch the sunrise and sunset every day
Look at your beautiful appearance
You are a little flower in early spring
I will silently guard your future
I really want to let time flow like this
Watch the full moon every night
Look at how happy you look
You are a little star in the sky
I will quietly watch over your future
I really want to let time flow like this
Look at the clouds every time
Look at your carefree look
You are a clear spring in the mountains and forests
I selflessly guard your future
I really want to let time flow like this
Watch the wind come and go every moment
Look at how happy you look
You are a little tree in the wilderness
I want to guard your future fearlessly
March 19, 2020
赏析
From the point of view of the creation time, this poem is a relatively early work of the poet, the structure of the poem is very neat, the poetry language is concise and bright, and the poetry is sincere, so that the reader can feel a clear and pure love heart of the poet. Poets use this kind of sentence structure and structure to express personal emotions, which is more common in the works of older generation poets, and it is also a common structural form used by beginner poetry creators. Therefore, the treatment of details in this kind of structure is very important, such as the refinement and selection of words, the selection of imagery, and the rhythm of emotion, which are the focus of investigation. Returning to this poem, the poet's choice of imagery and words is exquisite, and the internal relevance is strong, which adds a lot of color to the poem. Let's interpret the poem in an integrated way.
First of all, a striking feature is that the first sentence of each stanza is the same, "I really want to let time flow like this" is the theme of the poem, and all the content is associated with this as the center, which is very suitable as the title of the poem. Therefore, in this kind of juxtaposed structure of poetry, refining the central sentence is the key to the key, which is worth more thought, it dominates the whole poem, and it is also the core artistic conception composition. The refinement of this poem is still good, showing the yearning for beauty and the desire to stay forever, which is human nature.
Then look at the second sentence of each verse. The first time unit word, every day, every night, every hour, and every moment, can be read in tandem, from day to hour to minute, the decrease of time reflects the increase of emotion. Then there is the image group, "sunrise and sunset", "full moon and lack of moon", "clouds drifting", "wind and wind", these are all natural images, which are for the following service, combining the natural landscape with people's emotional state, blending into the scene, and being more vivid and lively in content, which strengthens the happiness and vitality of the poem.
Look again at the third sentence of each verse. Look at your beautiful, happy, carefree, happy appearance. This reflects the poet's affection, and these beautiful words also hide the poet's joy and happiness. Because, happiness and joy are contagious.
This is followed by the fourth sentence. The poet uses a simile of expression, which is very direct. Comparing you to a small flower in early spring, a star in the sky, a spring in the mountains and forests, and a small tree in the wilderness, these metaphors have a certain representativeness, focusing on expressing your beauty, brightness, innocence and vitality. This needs to be interpreted in relation to the following, what the poet has to do is to protect these qualities and qualities for you.
Finally, in the fifth sentence, the poet willingly guards for your goodness, and also adds four adverbial adverbs: silently, quietly, selflessly, fearlessly. It can be seen that the poet is fully devoted, but he loves carefully. This may be determined by the personality of the poet. In particular, silence and tranquility reflect the physical distance between the two, while selflessness and fearlessness reflect a sense of psychological closeness. And just in this way, the poet feels satisfied, and there is this sentence "I really want to let time flow like this", which can't help but make people feel the purity of the poet's love.
In terms of emotional experience, this is a very sincere poem. From the perspective of poetry creation, the artistic conception is slightly thin, but fortunately, the compensation of emotions makes the poetry very full and energetic.
Throwing bricks and leading jade, discussing poetry on poetry, and learning by writing, this is the end. If you have different opinions, please feel free to communicate in the comment area. If you have a recommended poem, please leave a message to let me know, enjoy it together, and make progress together. I am the poet Ge Ming Cao, welcome to pay attention, see you in the next issue of poetry review!
Author: Deng Wanfa, 15 years in the army, with the rank of major, worked in the government department of Zhongshan City, and later founded a business and did business. Passionate about poetry.