In recent years, in the college entrance examination, there are always several sets of examination papers every year with a grand composition theme. Today, I will share a full score essay on such a college entrance examination - "bitter, spicy, sour and sweet Shenzhou taste, sheng dan net end of Chinese love".
This is followed by an analysis by the author himself.
Qú shū,woven carpet. In ancient times, there were many carpets on the floor of the act, so "氍毹" can refer to the stage.
Huò,meat soup.
Qiandan refers to the male playing the female role on the stage.
Many college entrance examination full score essays cannot withstand careful scrutiny. At a cursory glance, hate cannot be said to be astonishing; a careful study will reveal many problems.
In fact, "amazing" is enough, "refreshing" is enough. In the face of many mediocre articles, it is enough to have bright spots in language and structure. Of course, the premise is that the examination questions are correct and the intention is good.
As an exam room essay, what can I learn from this article?
First, the overall layout.
The layout of the whole text is refreshing: the total score is total, simple and clear; the paragraph arrangement is dense and elegant.
The beginning is unique: the first two sentences are very plus, it is a scene description, there is a strong sense of picture, different from the general collar style of the beginning; it is a group of sentences, which initially shows the author's ability to make sentences.
From ancient times to the present, spatial transformation, a line of beads, parallel, layered, argument list, etc., no matter what the layout is, it is best to give people a clear and clear feeling, rather than "I think it is very clear".
Second, the accumulation of reading.
The same material, do you prefer Mu Xin, Calvino, "Who will eventually shock the world, will be silent for a long time; who will eventually ignite lightning, will be like a cloud drifting for a long time", or Edison, Marie Curie, "Failure is the mother of success"?
Teachers generally prefer to see the latter because it is not so easy to obtain. This article belongs to the latter.
The author seems to have a wide range of knowledge, a good understanding of Peking Opera culture, can easily grasp the details in "Dream of the Red Chamber", and should be as rare as the works of Zhang Xiaofeng, Tian Xiaofei and others, but in fact, it is not complete.
According to the author, many of the words and phrases in the text are from the usual excerpts. The author said: "Panlong Zhen" is excerpted from "Guitian Lu", "Monstrous Desire" is from Tian Xiaofei's "Qiushuitang on Jin Ping Mei", and "Hand Marks" is from a sentence in Zhang Xiaofeng's article. In the long-term reading life, she found something that matched her aura, then wrote it down, read it often, and finally she could use it as she pleased.