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For many children, action description is a difficult one. The words they write are either simply stacked verbs or described too generally and lack aesthetically pleasing. How can this be changed? In the representative work of writer Liu Xinwu and the winner of the Mao Dun Literature Award, "Bell and Drum Tower", a solution is given.
Liu Xinwu
Lu Baosang glanced at Xue Jiyue and "poofed" a musical sound. Tilting his head, he grabbed the packet of "gift flower" cigarettes from the coffee table, opened it and took out one, and took out a lighter from his pocket. "Bar-da" shot out the old high flame, lit the cigarette, and then comfortably leaned back on the sofa, and the child sucked like a milk.
In this passage, in addition to using a series of verbs, Liu Xinwu also added onomatopoeia such as "poof" and "bar-ta". Suddenly, the senses of this passage are enriched from a single vision to the unity of vision and hearing, and the sense of picture becomes stronger.
Bell and Drum Tower
Let's try to add onomatopoeia to the action description to see the effect:
1. "Boom", the door was kicked open by his brother. He was sweating profusely and shouting, "Exhausted, exhausted..." As he spoke, his body was like a heavy stone, and he "pounced" on the sofa.
2. As soon as the school bell rang, the acute child sprang out of the classroom like a hunting dog, Oh pedal..., and ran down the stairs.
hunting dog
In addition to adding onomatopoeia – that is, hearing – we can also expand on this and add other sensory factors.
For example, in the following paragraph, I added touch and smell to the description of the action:
Without paying attention, I stepped on a piece of, and the bottom of my shoes suddenly became sticky, not to mention how uncomfortable. The pungent stench instantly exploded in the air and spread around, causing me to pinch my nose. "What bad luck!" I hate to think. I had to take turns lifting my feet and rubbing my shoes on the ground over and over again, making a "nourishing" sound.
You see, is the sense of picture stronger?
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